About My Roleplaying as Venti in Aotu

The writing is quite good, but once the author started writing about the fighting, he became so ruthless that he became completely obsessed with the battle he described and couldn't extricate himself [face covering] [face covering]

Delicate writing style is a major characteristic of the teacher. It would be nice if there could be less fighting and more plot advancement.

I feel like the characters are pretty good, not particularly OOC or anything, and Wendy is also very cute. However, the plot may be a little delayed, and there may not be anything substantial in one chapter. There are too many long paragraphs of description. I can only say that the author has a very good literary talent, but for the novel, it may be better to be more concise^ω^

No, it's so beautiful. Except for the fighting part, the other characters are really detailed. If you're more selective, you can give it a try.

Overall, it's okay. The battle descriptions are really thoughtful and detailed. If you come to read Wendy, you can try the first few chapters to enjoy yourself. The redemption of Reiner in the later period is also good, with a detailed description of Reiner's psychological transformation and inner struggle. Those who like Reiner can also check it out. Regarding Zi Tang Huan in this book, if you are Huan Chu, congratulations, you can see many highlights of Zi Tang Huan's self-awakening. But there are also a few big problems that I think: 1. The pace is a bit slow, mostly because there are too many battle descriptions, and I feel that no matter who I am fighting, the scenes are very shocking. The expressiveness is enough but a bit too much, giving people a feeling of excessive force. This situation does not matter in the early stage, but in the later stage, the description of combat power may collapse. It depends on how the author controls it. 2. There are more descriptions of Zi Tanghuan and Reiner than of Wendy. In the current chapter, Wendy is mainly a behind-the-scenes figure who protects the protagonist group. She will only come to the rescue when the protagonist group needs someone to save the situation, and then there will be highlights. I understand that the author wants to write every character well and give them a good character image, but is it too much? This question is not just raised by me. The Zi Tang Huan created in this article is indeed good, with a lot more opinions of his own, but there are some words and sentences that are used repeatedly when describing Reiner. For example, "It was so heavy that it almost crushed Lena." It can be seen that the author likes this sentence very much. It appears for the first time in Chapter 52, once in a changed sentence, in Chapter 53, the original sentence appears twice, in Chapter 61, once in the original sentence, twice in the original sentence in Chapter 63, once in the original sentence, once in a changed sentence, and once in Chapter 69. (I laughed when I was searching, did you laugh, author?) This will make the reader feel bad. I hope the author can change it in the future, because it will appear that the author has nothing to write and can only pull out old sentences. 3. This is the biggest problem I think. It is said that I am playing Wendy, but I am just playing a shell of Wendy. Every word and action is full of labels. For example, the words "wind" and "freedom" appear too frequently in the protagonist's speech, which has reached the point where I am bored. Chapter 1 There are many deep and meaningful sentences with wind and freedom in it. People who read them will probably think that there are many, but in Genshin Impact, the frequency of the words wind and freedom appearing in Wendy's words and deeds is very low. I am not a Wendy chef, but I feel something is a little weird, so I went to unify it. I counted the frequency of these two words appearing in the main storyline of Genshin Mondstadt and Wendy's lines in Windless Land. Excluding the words Wind Field and Wind God, wind appeared 7 times and freedom 9 times. However, the content of these two words in this article is so high that every other character has to say one or two sentences about wind. No matter how profound the Riddler's sentences are, it will also appear that the author's Wendy is a bit flat and superficial. Some people may say that this is an acting and not the real person, but even if it is an acting, there are similarities or dissimilarities. After reading it, I feel that there is only a superficial resemblance, and there are enough stereotypes. Generally speaking, it's okay. At present, I think these are the things that can be improved. The author in the group said that he will start to make changes. I think it is pretty good. Author, please continue to work hard. I hope you will write better and better in the future. I will give it a four-star rating first and see how it goes in the future.

(I actually wanted to give it 4 stars, but after thinking about it, it's actually pretty good overall, so I'll just give it this rating) Okay, let me do the talking 1. There are a lot of adjectives overall, which actually leads to some procrastination and word reading fatigue. 2. The allocation of roles is unreasonable. I can understand that the author likes Zi Tang, and it is normal to add roles to his favorite characters, but it is completely overdone. Most of the chapters are written around him. What we read is basically directed at Wendy, not Zi Tang. In the middle and late stages, it starts to focus on Lena. I really want to ask, who is the protagonist? ? It's okay to add scenes to your favorite characters, but please also distinguish between the protagonist and who the audience is watching. 3. We finally got back to the main plot... There weren't many highlights in the first season. I just wanted to finish the unnecessary main plot chapters as soon as possible while adding original plots, and only focus on the key highlights of the main plot. 4. To be honest, Wen has changed his major, have you considered changing here too? Also, Wen is also related to time, but seeing that he can only use the power related to time once now, will there be a chance to show it again in the future? (Although it feels unrealistic, it will overdraft the price after all, so it is better to do well) (That's all I have to say, and I look forward to the follow-up. I have endured it for a long time every time and insisted on reading the book, so that I can read several pages at once. I hope I can write more and update more, and don't give up! Please stick to it until the whole book is finished, please!!)

It's pretty good. In fact, I also want to give it 4 points. I just saw someone in the comment area who seemed to be like this. He wrote it well, but I still feel that the description is a bit too much. I can't describe it well. There is a feeling that the text on the entire screen seems to be gradually changing. Zoom in, I'm on the face, but the story plot, anyway... I don't know what to say, mainly because there are too many descriptions, and the plot may be slower to advance, but it is still well written, but it would be better if there were less descriptions and more storylines [Like] [Like] [Like] Of course, this may be a writing style, but I'm not used to reading this type of writing, but in short, it's well written, come on

I only wrote a review when I was halfway through it. It really shocked me. I have also read a lot of novels or sequels related to depression, but the transformation of Zitang Huan was written in such a layered way. Although his growth was helped by others, not everyone's growth is supported by someone encouraging him and helping him. But any of the most important decisions were made by himself, which really shocked me. The writing was so delicate, and I felt that my soul had been sublimated. Genzhen is a very good child, and so is Miss Lena. They are both good children.

The writing style is delicate, full of twists and turns, and the logic is harmonious. Just as the author said, writing Wendy well is not just about writing about a person. It makes me feel that the growth and transformation of Zitang Huan and Lena who are strangers in other humanities are always surprising. The author has a good idea from a broad perspective. He likes the narrative aspect between the battle plot and the relationship between the characters. It flows as freely as the "wind". Wendy does not appear much in the later chapters, but the concave and convex competition affected by the "wind" is re-portrayed. Zitang Huan and Lena beside the passers-by are like collected story books, shining, and write about the sense of sight of Wendy who is always by his side, like the tenderness and compassion of a god. Just like "The wind will bring the seeds of time and cause them to sprout", you can feel the author's understanding of the characters after reading it in full. It is not limited to one-sidedness, but cuts through the innermost essence. The slow-paced narrative method is like listening to Wendy telling a story. Worth the second brush The whole thing is a bit of a group novel, with the protagonist (Wendy) as the main character, and describing the growth and transformation of other characters. The author defines novel writing, and the long description of rhetoric should be due to hand fetish. The quality of this fanfic is very good, the plot has no plot points, and the battles are exciting.

It's so beautiful. Like the new book. Please give 3~4 likes for the new book. Otherwise it will be easily removed from the shelves