Body Swap: The Quest to Find My Sister's Body

A novel with great potential, the setting is very imaginative, but there is too little preparation for the occurrence of some things, including the fact that the current collector gives some sudden help to the male protagonist just because of his morbid love for collectibles, Anna's lottery of body parts depends entirely on luck, and other incidents (but I won't go into details). Although there is no problem with the logic, the conflicts and twists and turns of the novel are weakened. There is also the handling of the creation of branch plots. When the main plot is very compact and the linear development is closely connected, the sudden insertion of a branch plot with minimal correlation to the main plot will have a great impact on the reader's interest in reading. I suggest that you can not publish the well-written branch story or strengthen the connection between the branch plot and the main plot, or add the main plot to slow down the transitional chapters to slow down the pace of the main plot. The last point is that there are some problems with the creation of the male protagonist's personal image. There is insufficient growth and development, and there is little preparation for the change of personal character. From an ordinary person to an indomitable brother, the growth of this kind of character requires special events, special tasks, or repeated strengthening of beliefs to be reasonable but unexpected. All in all, it is a very exciting story. The above suggestions are only my personal opinions after reading for about 1-2 hours. I hope the author will continue to work hard and complete this tortuous story built in a wonderful background. Five-star praise!

How did this sister mint coins so much that she lost all her body?

Recommendation: Start a new side story, don't include it in the main plot This novel is very imaginative, with a strong gray main theme emotion mixed in every word, as if someone is reading a frightening story in a serious tone and the tone of an emperor's uncle. There is a weird feeling that the Twin Towers hit the plane during takeoff (failed to take off), It is recommended to polish the character more and use less fixed templates, so that people can guess the ending after seeing the beginning (looking at the old man and the girl, I knew that Mr. Li was going to be a monster later, and I felt a deep sense of powerlessness). Evil people have their own trials, and innocent people should give her a good ending. It is said that the author's inspiration for writing this novel was not the royal movie "The Gift of God", right? (One complaint: I feel that the reason why the author suddenly wrote the side story is because he didn't know how to write the main plot) At the end... If there is still a way to suppress it, I will post a long review here to make up for the ending. Overall, it is good. I will give it a five-star review. The author will update more (urge for updates) [Grgrievance][Grgrievance][Grgrievance]

Six hundred and sixty-six. In the 21st century, you can still read a good spelling book. The world view is very good. The creativity that I have never seen before is also the highlight of this book. However, the author dropped his m4 while playing on the subway, and the book also went cold.

Yes, the setting is very imaginative and the writing is okay. This book has potential. Recommended viewing order. Since this book has too many extras, it is recommended to read the main story first and then watch the extras. I would like to give the author a suggestion: write the main story first, and then write the side stories. Otherwise, reading and reading the side stories will affect the perception. Moreover, sometimes the number of chapters in your side stories is more than the main story. This is a bit indistinguishable between the main story and the sub story. Secondly, the portrayal of the protagonist is too monotonous. How the sister lost her body was not written in detail. What is the relationship between Black Feather and the protagonist's body doll? You can also write about it. This can not only enrich the character image, but also lay down the foreshadowing, so that you will not lack inspiration. Also, the character of the protagonist is a bit too bad to be a good guy. I don't hate good protagonists, but sometimes the protagonist is too bad to be a good guy. There are still flaws. The typos are a bit outrageous. What do you mean by squeezing the toothbrush onto the toothpaste? Although it has a few shortcomings, it is rich in imagination. In summary, it is a book that has potential to be read.

There is a kind of book in the world that is destined to never be finished from the moment it is released. What else can I say, I really want to hide the negative reviews, but good books should not be buried, read and cherish them, and be sure to add a bookshelf. Author, you should be healthy [cry] [cry] [cry] [cry] You should be happy [cry] [cry] [cry] [cry] It doesn't matter if the book is blocked [cry] [cry] [cry] [cry] Don't run away author [cry] [cry] [cry] [cry] Create a group author [cry] [cry] [cry] [cry] How can I live without you Author [cry] [cry] [cry] [cry]

The heart remains the same despite all the changes. Why should a man hide his appearance? The totem side shows masculinity and beauty, and the cloak is the perfect match for the majestic man. The endless fragrance of wild flowers in the wilderness kills all the aliens Gu Bahuang Go straight to the heaven to play with the goddess, look up to the sky and laugh out loud from the imperial pass

A very novel book and very interesting to read. Although I have read more than 1,000 hours of books, I have rarely reviewed them, but this one is worth it. (I'm not emphasizing that I have too much time to read, but I'm emphasizing that this book is very good). Come on, author.

My super assembler, this sister is also a character, she can play with her own body

The plot and writing are very good, but don't add too much beyond the main plot, and focus on the main plot.