Our Online Romance Went Wrong When We Met in Person: My Creditor Is a Yandere

I'm tired, I just can't post my 2000-word book review😡. I think it's slightly sweet, but the heroine can't express emotions. The author's description of emotions is too sharp. The profit-oriented mother loves the protagonist, and the character design is okay. When polishing the emotional transition, the difference between before and after is too big, and the heroine should be made fuller. Write more from the heroine's perspective. Of course it would be cruel to only sympathize with the protagonist. Ps: For this type of yandere two-girl novel, emotion is the dominant one, the plot serves the emotion, the emotion is expressed smoothly, and the plot just needs to be natural (it doesn't mean to ignore the plot, but to achieve the emotion, what kind of plot is needed). Something of an extremely personal nature: Don't say "be" just because you feel abused. Can "b" or "h" be decided in just one sentence? Don't you want to see future plot developments? Their endings are determined through only a short paragraph. With all due respect, deep and delicate emotions cannot withstand such manipulation. It's a mixed bag of good and bad, but I'm not stingy with five stars, so go to the author.

Wow, I fell in love with it from the first five chapters. This is the first time I can't wait to review a book. (Don't ask why you fell in love with me in the first five chapters) Teacher Lu's driving speed is not that fast. Hey, sure enough, in Tomatoes, half of the book title is on the cover, and the remaining half is based on the opening chapter. 1. If the relationship between Fu and , at the beginning of the chapter is equal, then the signing of the contract is the beginning of Fu's desire for control and the beginning of pathological possession. At first I was attracted by the opening chapter, because in my opinion they were at least consensual. But later, Fu Yu's almost paranoid grasp of Qing Yun only brought me suffocation. 2. It's so crazy. At this stage, Fu Yu is only sick but not coquettish towards Qing Yun. She is like a toy, ravaging her at will. Her mother's forced marriage, Fu Yu's oppression, the Fu family's contempt, the class gap, and her initial love for Fu Yu all became a cage that trapped Qing Yun. I still felt so sorry for Qing Yun.

Be strong! It's okay to be scared when you see your wife

It's really good to watch, the story is very heartwarming, and there is no element of abuse at all🤗The two heroines often interact (in a physical sense), the plot is compact and fast-paced, (the car speed is also fast❓️) Come and read the sweet article [Blow Kiss]

Friends who like to read forced love stories about yandere girls should rush hard. It fits this setting very well, and the speed is very fast (in every sense of the word). I have read more than 50 chapters so far and the writing is very enjoyable. I don't recommend reading it at night if you are easily excited and can't sleep.

I tend to read reviews first when reading a book. First of all, this book's emotional speed is very fast, and the description is also more detailed. The setting of the characters is obvious. Xiang is completely at a disadvantage in this relationship and is controlled. I do not deny the author's writing ability, but the plot is unexpected and slightly uncomfortable. First of all, the author's setting of Fu is a yandere, which makes her not very good to Xiang. . . I treat her with a completely abnormal possessiveness, just like my own toy. I don't know how to be so kind and doting on Xiang. It's all about abuse. Is Xiang suffering from Stockholm Syndrome in this abnormal relationship? Otherwise, I can't explain how I fell in love with Fu. I can only say that it is very frustrating and disgusting. . . I think I read a lot of yandere articles like this. . . . I don't appreciate it. I think yandere is possessive in falling in love, but I can't see that Fu's love is only possessive. This incongruity is very strange, but I have to say that the author's character creation is very good. Otherwise, my resistance would not be so strong. I think the author can try to write some other settings. Your writing is not bad, but the plot is too good. . . It's unacceptable. If you can't write a sweet story, I think you can try to normalize the plot and make all the emotions of the heroines reasonable. I don't know if you have an emotional life. If so, you can integrate ordinary emotional issues into the article. I think this can make the abuse more three-dimensional, rather than abuse for the sake of abuse. You can portray Fu's character more "round" in the later period. For example, why Fu is like this? Is it related to family, growing environment, interpersonal relationships, etc. There are incentives for this purely pathological psychology and inability to love others. He is not a yandere from birth. This can make the audience more accepting. After Xiang has experienced this, she cannot look at her feelings very calmly, and will have emotions such as awe and fear for her lover. In other words, if the ending is he, Fu will undoubtedly change or compromise. Xiang cannot help Fu change himself. She has been hurt too much, so he will be very difficult. Fu can only learn how to love little by little. If the plot is not like this, then Fu will love people originally, but he just doesn't know how to love Xiang. His character will easily collapse. I want to say that your writing style is better than most authors. It's just that you don't have a good grasp of the plot. You can take a look at high-rated articles. Of course, you can incorporate your own views on yandere. After all, it's your own decision how to write the article. There are thousands of people and thousands of colors. Some people don't like it, but some people like it. It's not easy for you to write a book, so I didn't give it one star. The flaws may be big. After all, you want to relax when you read the article. The more you read, the more uncomfortable it becomes, which may cause the article to have a low rating.

I feel like the author is really good at writing morbid literature, which is so shocking. [The masterpiece of bird food] I don't quite agree that the ending will be he, because the morbidity itself is a feeling that favors be, which is very depressing. If he really wants to be he, Fu Yu has to change, gradually change from a morbid mentality to a healthy one, learn to let go, learn to respect, and learn to understand. However, it seems that there is nothing that can promote this series of development, so it is unlikely to be he. ^_^

Very good, but Qingyun is so miserable [crying] [crying] I can't bear it. Is there a crematorium for chasing wives? If so, it must be longer. If Qingyun forgives her easily, then what does Qingyun's previous suffering count? Torture Fu more and let her know how to love

This is my first time writing a book review, and I may not write it very well. When I first read the introduction and the first few chapters, I didn't pay much attention to the word "forced love". I thought that the overall story might be a bit different and the author said it was "he". I would think there was forced love, but maybe the relationship between the two protagonists would be more daily and sweet. But I didn't expect that after looking back, I would find that it was not what I thought. The identity asymmetry between the two protagonists and the early stage of Fu's story were more about satisfying his own possessiveness. The author writes particularly well in this aspect, including the contempt Fu's friends and family treat Xiang (at this time, she did not give Xiang a sense of security or comfort her, which is very different from some of the articles I have read before.) And Fu's control over Xiang's daily life. It's particularly depressing. From Xiang's perspective, I really feel that it's not easy for her to last until more than 90 chapters before committing suicide. In the past, I could accept some forced love stories I read, but there wasn't much of a forced love aspect. The two main characters liked each other and there was a little bit of forced love, and I also read a little more intense love stories, but I found that I couldn't accept them. Then the author's book is much stronger than the one I read before, but it's not unacceptable. It's just right. In fact, when Xiang committed suicide in the early stage, I really wanted to see Fu Chai's wife's crematorium, and then Xiang lost his memory, so there was no cruelty. Then I always wanted to watch her torture her when she regained her memory, but when she lost her memory, some of Fu's actions towards her were much restrained. If her memory was restored at this time, it wouldn't feel very cruel. I feel that if it goes as I thought, it would not be as cruel as before. Later, when she was trying to recover her memory, she caught up with Fu getting injured trying to save her, and she felt interrupted again. (But these are the kind of plots I like, and it's good that the author wrote them this way.)

The author writes well, and I personally like this kind of article, but after reading many articles, I feel that the way Yu Xiang Qingyun and Fu Yu get along is incomprehensible. The gap between them is too big, and it is basically impossible to reconcile. If possible, just pretend that I didn't say anything. Of course, I will keep reading. I hope the author will continue to work hard.