Tongtong's Dad Makes Money: Book Three

The author seems to have writing skills and wanted to portray the protagonist's feelings and thoughts during battle, but it felt like there was too much writing, and the pacing was a bit slow for today's Tomato Novels. It would be even better if the author could tone it down a bit. Finally, I want to say, please update faster! I can't get enough!!!

They shouted about bonds, friendship, and that they had family waiting for them to come home, then rushed at me and killed me.

The subject matter is decent, but there's too much rambling and it's too drawn out. I suggest the author streamline it. The game feels a bit redundant; all the mecha are just for scanning online videos, wouldn't it be better to make the protagonist a sentient AI? I'll still give it five stars as encouragement. Keep up the good work, author! I hope your writing gets better and better.

Here's a suggestion for the author: At the end, anthropomorphize the mechs. If the author has seen the finale of Dragon Ball III, they'll understand what I mean. After all, mechs with life are the strongest.

It's definitely a good read, but the current plot feels like a grand game of chess, full of conspiracies and intrigues. We'll see if the author can handle it. The name is a bit odd, like that kind of mindless, feel-good story (not that mindless, feel-good stories are bad, I also enjoy reading them). But judging from the current plot development, it doesn't seem to be that kind of story.

I was going to yell at you, but seeing your name I couldn't bring myself to do it. You should just be happy about it!

The combination of mecha and cute girls is cutting-edge and very appealing; the portrayal of human nature is well done; the inspirational parts are well-structured, and the protagonist's growth process is clear; the combat system isn't flawed—there are power-ups, but not to the point of invincibility—making it a semi-satisfying read, more interesting than a fully-fledged one; and the descriptions…

The pacing is too slow; this kind of writing might not be to Tomato's liking, but the article itself is still acceptable.

That's strange, the book looks pretty good, why is nobody here? Oh, is it a new book? Never mind then.

The pacing is good. The only reason people say it's slow is because there aren't enough updates, leaving readers wanting more. I bet many people are currently reading this book on a long, drawn-out basis. I think it would be even cooler to give the main character a transformation, like a tank or a fighter jet.