Tongtong's Dad Makes Money: Book Three

It seems that the author has good writing skills. I wanted to write about the mood and thoughts of the protagonist in the battle, but I felt that there was too much written. The pace is a bit slow in the current tomato novels. It would be better if the author could moderate it a little more. The last thing I want to say is, quick update! Not enough! ! ! ! ! !

They shouted about bonds and friendship. There were still people at home who were waiting for me to come back, so they rushed up and beat me to death.

The subject matter is not bad, but there is a lot of nonsense and is too procrastinating. I suggest the author streamline it. I personally feel that the game is a bit redundant. Isn't it better to just scan the online video if the machine is already in use? Wouldn't it be better to make the protagonist an AI with autonomous consciousness? I'll give it a five point as encouragement. Come on, the author hopes that you will write better and better.

Give the author a suggestion. Make the mecha humanized in the end. If the author has watched the finale of the third part of Dragon Warrior. Just know what I mean. After all, the living mecha is the strongest.

It is indeed interesting to watch, but the current plot seems like a big game of chess, with various conspiracies and so on. Let's see if the author can grasp it. It's just that the name is a bit weird, like I'm the type of person who likes to be cool without brains (I'm not saying that having fun without brains is bad, I also like to read cool articles), but looking at the current direction of the plot, it doesn't seem to be the case.

I wanted to scold you angrily, but I still can't bear it when I see your name, so just have fun!

The mecha and the beautiful girl are very cutting-edge and attractive; the portrayal of human nature is very good; the inspirational part has a beginning and an end, and the protagonist's growth process is relatively clear; there is no broken fighting system, there are failures, but not to the point of invincibility, it can be regarded as a semi-cool article, more interesting than a full-cool article; and the description of Chinese martial arts is very exciting. It can be seen that the author has carefully studied how to describe martial arts, thumbs up [like] [love]

The pace is too slow. This kind of article may not be suitable for Tomato, but the article is okay.

It's strange, the book feels pretty good, why is there no one? Oh~ So it's a new book? That's okay.

The pace is okay. To say you have a slow pace is just because there are too few updates and it is not enjoyable to read. I guess there are many book readers now. I feel that it would be more cool to give the protagonist a transformation, such as a tank or a fighter plane.