Becoming a Witch: Miss Qiandao's Second Personality

The setting is very attractive, and the writing is good enough. The only drawback is that the plot is slow to follow and makes it a bit uncomfortable to follow. It took 170,000 words to be pushed to the branch. It should have taken a long time to write, but it still does not affect the fact that it is a good work.

The story setting and writing are pretty good, but the wording is too gorgeous and seems a bit exhausted. Maybe a few years ago, it would have been very popular, but in today's fast-paced life, it is a failure. And to be honest, there is no work that is good enough to make people feel that everything is worth it. It is equivalent to an 80-point work, but you need to pay attention to see it, but you can easily and smoothly see 80-point works in other places. [Chigua] is more suitable for people who like this genre and have a slow mind. Or if you don't have any good novels, then this can be a waste of time. [Chigua] It feels like there's a bit too much emphasis on the heroine's cuteness, just like the protagonist in the first ten chapters of the early stage, who can only scream and howl, but can't do anything. Later, there are always some things that can be explained, but the heroine is stupid, and then the protagonist does not explain it, just calls him a fool, and then the heroine retorts, "I am not a fool, I am a fool." Just like coquettishness, too much is not enough. Can this kind of character really be used as a writer? The protagonist also has 3 million words of writing on the setting. He treats the heroine as a daughter, but does not explain anything, and only calls idiots. It really makes people feel uncomfortable after reading too much. Repeated routines, repeated stupidity, but no education. He will not tell the heroine that what he just did is stupid and why he can't do that. He will not tell her. He will only call her stupid [laughter]

I haven't seen much tomatoes, so I don't know what the environment here is like. If there are comparison objects, I think I can make a more accurate evaluation. So I can only make an evaluation based on the average level of another website. There is no doubt that the author's writing skills are quite good, and he has put a lot of effort into describing the appearance of the girls. The narrative perspective is based on the protagonist, and it seems to be a setting of one body and two souls. This perspective is quite novel in the books I know. Moreover, the world view of the plot is also very innovative. Mahou Soju and other things have become very popular in recent years. The concentration of oranges is also very high, and the fat intestines are not punctured. It's simply spiritual food! Although I feel that the author's online writing experience is a bit immature, I tell you that often only this kind of author has the potential to become a big shot! Don't let me down, given time, you will definitely become a big boss! (Especially the boss of Orange Literature!)😎

It's all good-looking, feel free to read it [laughing evilly] [OK] I brushed it twice when I didn't grow up, and here's a summary: The writing style is very good, and it ranks high in today's Tomato books, but it seems a bit "scientific". Most of the content of the article is biased toward descriptions of appearance, environment, and actions. The exquisite vocabulary may be surprising when you first appreciate it, but too much description will lose the sense of surprise when you first appreciate it, making people feel boring, and it also leads to The slow progress of the plot makes people lose interest in reading. The current feeling is that dozens of chapters have passed but only two or three days have passed in the book. This may be one of the reasons why this book has so few readers (but it is full of sugar, very sweet 👍). The protagonist is also uneasy about his identity as a time traveler, which may also be a poisonous point for some readers. What I suggest to the author here is: appropriately reduce the description without making the book mediocre, speed up the advancement of the main plot while interspersing some daily life, correct the protagonist (don't be decadent and self-destructive because of such trivial things, you bastard!), And the most important point: increase the amount, increase the amount, increase the amount! It's not enough to watch! It's hard to find a good book, don't give up [crazy] The author is so great, can he keep books? [Laughs crookedly]

Among the themes of many magical girls in Tomato, this book's one-body and two-spirits are eye-catching. The time traveler does not completely replace the protagonist, but as a character who usually does not interfere in her daily life, it feels like twins [blowing kisses]. Unlike the future generations of magical girls who are usually either fighting or on the road to battle, this book has not read any lines of suffering, hatred, darkness and cruelty. This kind of ode to friendship and daily life made my eyes shine. I hope the author can work hard! I like the daily routines with good writing and the occasional dramatic battles! Give you a five-star review and keep updating! [Crazy]

In a strange setting, the battle of the magical girl becomes a stage play. The better the performance, the more powerful the magical girl becomes. The magical girl is more like an actor. The witch is not a villain in the traditional sense, but another lineup. The characters who appear in the stage play will affect the established ending of the stage play. Therefore, if the magical girl wants to perform well, she must drive them out first. It's okay, there's nothing wrong with the writing, there's nothing serious about the plot, it's mainly about Lily Tie Tie (screening readers). This subject, if you say it sounds good, is called novel magical girls, if it sounds bad, it's called "forcibly rubbing against magical girls" (this sentence can also be reversed, it is relatively neutral). I can't comment on it, so I will give it 4 stars to save myself from arguing with others.

I think the author's preference for figurative art expression and the integration of operatic elements have perfectly created the characteristics of this work. The aria-like inner monologue, the duet-like dialogue structure, and the stage lighting-like environmental description together constitute a unique set of narrative grammar. This deliberate sense of form is not decorative, but forms a deep intertextuality with the theme. The long rhythm, detailed environment, and delicate emotions are all things that the author tried his best to express and work hard for. It perfectly serves as a stepping stone to assist the plot. It is not the poisonous point in some people's opinion. The slow pace, complicated environment expression, and complex characters' emotions, etc., Just negate the author's creative habits. Just as readers have different tastes, please don't deny the author's characteristics. Works that lack characteristics will ultimately be lackluster. Above

Y1s1, whether it is to show off skills or to shape the world view, the author's accumulation of writing is beyond doubt. (Compared to DS, not string) The entire stage world shows extremely outstanding features in the author's introduction of less than 200,000 words, which is highly recognizable compared to other online texts. (It's not a compliment, it's a fact) The characters of the girls are also quite appropriate. There are no bad character designs for the time being (maybe just because I haven't written much yet). The sugar content is very high. I followed [][][]

It feels like a self-help article, the kind of daily article that is a bit packed with words. Those who are interested in radio waves will probably like it. If it is not suitable, I will probably not be able to read it at all. It is a new book, and I will give it a 5⭐ Supplement: After reading the first two chapters, it is recommended to skip reading and briefly look at the relationship between the characters. It feels like the main text barely begins around chapter 20. The descriptions in the middle are a bit too protracted and it is easy to read (only a suggestion, it depends on the individual situation) Supplement 2: Basically, it's a little bit of daily life interspersed with various Lily script interpretations. The magical girls here are more inclined to idol actors. I don't know if the villain didn't appear. Basically, all the members are Lily-oriented. If you like it, you can check it out.

Shoujo opera-style magical girl, the description is very, very delicate, which is good news for those who like to play up the drama in their minds. But the price is that the amount of text information is extremely low. The plot of a normal novel can be written in 10,000 words, but this book requires 30,000 words. Underestimated, maybe 50,000 words It's tied. The update experience for this book is probably the worst, so I'll see you in a month and see if you've gained weight [plus one on bookshelf]