Dragon Raja: From the Start, I Was Classmates with Xia Mi

I would like to give you a suggestion. Don't use words like "dao" or "shuo" when talking about characters. When listening to books, it's a bit annoying when they talk a lot [face covering]

It's okay, but it still feels a little flawed. First of all, they always add "who said so" at the end of the dialogue. In fact, there is no need to add this at the end of some dialogues. Each person can clearly distinguish which sentence is said by whom. The main reason for adding "Tao" is that it is uncomfortable when listening to the book. In fact, the impact on the writing is just that, so it is a minor problem. Secondly, the plot direction is really very similar to "No Money" at present. The author should have watched "No Money", and even similar original corresponding characters can be found in it. The current main plot is also: early admission (earlier than Chu Zihang) + practical class tasks + trip to Japan. After reading "No Money", I felt nothing when reading this book. It's hard to highlight your original plot without writing more details when the outline is almost the same. Finally, I feel that Xia Mi is really not lively enough in this book. Combining with the first question, removing some of the "dao" behind Xia Mi's words and replacing them with her small movements (such as jumping around, blocking the protagonist's neck, suddenly leaning her face) or expressions (such as sticking out her tongue, blinking her eyes, making faces) will fit the character much more and the writing will be smoother. Moreover, Xia Mi really talks less sometimes, and she does not feel like she is complaining about a yakuza or an energetic girl.

Haokang, is this the single heroine of Mr. Daye?

There are some shortcomings in the emotions of the characters. For example, the section where Angers introduces the Lionheart Club to the protagonist can be changed to "Angers looked at him with twinkling eyes". There are also some flaws in some places. You can find them if you write more. It is relatively good, but it will be boring if you read too much.

I hope I accept Eri, she is so pitiful

Come on! ! !

Okay, I've finished reading. It's a pretty good book. It's worth staying up late to read. [Blow a kiss][Flow a kiss][Flow a kiss]

Still have to look.

Very good, quality guaranteed

Is the protagonist an indigenous person? Single heroine or harem story? It feels like there are too many private settings.