Lord, We Have a Problem

Generally speaking, the objective evaluation is three stars plus one star for encouragement. It is recommended that the author delete the setting of the second chapter. The reason is that you wrote the setting in the second chapter, and it is very convoluted and even inexplicable. Unless you often reveal it, no one will remember it. If you can't remember it, readers will not understand it when you suddenly write more plot points. Secondly, I saw chapter 20. The handling of details is like a newcomer. The protagonist is talking throughout the text. In chapter 20, the businessman said a few words and Leon two sentences and it was gone! It seems to have a strong sense of fragmentation. The most unpleasant thing is that it is a narrative diary, a first-person perspective diary. If you can change it, you should change it as soon as possible, otherwise it will not be far away from 56 points. 100,000 Words Tomato recommends it. Try to set the score before 130,000 words, otherwise it will be all low-scoring garbage.

It's just so-so. It doesn't have that good feeling. It's okay to pass the time when I'm in a book shortage. If I heard about it directly, there's no other feeling.

Very interesting, give it a thumbs up