Chakra? If It Can't Grant Immortality, How Is It Supernatural?

After reading it, the writing is pretty good, but it's too watery. It's not that it's too watery, but the plot setting is too watery. There are also some minor unreasonable bugs, which have been commented. If you don't like it, you can delete the comment. If you adopt it, you can still make changes. The protagonist does not look like a 34-year-old with a high IQ, but like an 18-year-old with knowledge plug-ins who "knows" the plot. The title of the novel has also been changed. It doesn't match the content. I became invincible very quickly at the beginning, Eternal Kaleidoscope + Heaven-defying Eye Technique, and other fan fictions started to stop me from eating beef. You still care about this and that. Although your attitude is indeed strong, your behavior is too soft. After reaching chapter 60 or 70, you are still drinking tea and fishing every day. Have you learned the immortal mode? Still feel that you are not strong enough? In this timeline, your strength and ability are not enough to not eat beef? In general, this novel is still okay. After all, it is FQ. It is a refreshing article to pass the time and the development of the new Uchiha gambit. However, this book is not very enjoyable, but it is half enjoyable [eating melon], and it is worth a read.

It's not too much to encourage yourself by giving your book a five-star review, right? ! [Sinister smile]

I keep writing like this. I wish you fame and fortune.

It's awesome, super cool, and the logic is clear. There are a few bugs, but it's not a big problem. I like this Universal Chibo Eternal Reincarnation Eye. I really don't understand, why the hell is this rated so low? Damn it, did the author offend someone?

Not bad! As long as there are people, there will be fights, let alone between countries! The unification of the ninja world is the greatest peaceful solution for the Naruto world. . . Strong suppression, as long as the protagonist is still there. . . Who dares to start a war?

[Smile] Despite his invincible strength, he also talks a lot, like a villain.

Good morning, world, I wake up in the early morning. Good afternoon, world, the positive anode has strong fire power. Good night, world, the purple clouds are gathering in the evening The world is not a beautiful place, die early and be reborn early The world is beautiful enough, run towards the rising sun The world is not a beautiful place, but I have great hope in my heart The world is 90% beautiful, and sleep quality is safe and reliable The world is a little bad, fix it The world is a bit bad, change her The world is obviously bad, create him The world is so bad, break it apart The world is hopelessly bad, create a new one The world... Actually, it's not about the coming and going of people, but more about the coming and going of flowers and plants. It's society, it's a group, it's everyone's The world is personal. When you leave the world, it stops. There is no such thing as a group composed of worlds Since you said it's none of my business and the world won't stop because of me, then what does it have to do with you if my world stops? It's good to stop occasionally, just turn your body around and let your heart and mind relax for a while. Let the blankness like despair temporarily fill your brain You will understand how painful it is to have the world come to a standstill when the novel is interrupted. .

Encourage points, the dialogue sometimes feels frivolous and childish, and the plot is not as concise and clear as the beginning. Come on.

My favorite type is resonance at the same frequency. It's a matter of details. I'd like to make a few suggestions. Why don't you use it after finding the evidence? It's weird when you debate. It feels more reasonable. The advantage is that it's fast-paced and logical. I have a strong feeling of wanting to read on.

The protagonist was a little cautious at the beginning, but it was okay. The author said that he had just started writing a book, and he listened to the advice and changed it later. So far, it seems that it is okay [understand]