The Pei Family's Concubine-Born Son

I'm an old bookworm, but this book feels pretty good. There are no big logical holes in the plot, and the writing is pretty good. Is it just that the author is not good at transitions? Many transitions do not describe the next scene directly. The one that left a deep impression was the one where Li Yuanzhu killed the eunuch who gave him poppy incense. There was no transition. There was also the one where Yu'er recalled the past to supplement the plot. No transition is like a sentence without punctuation, two words: uncomfortable. (You can try to switch to the next scene first, instead of opening it with the character's dialogue, use demeanor and environment description to pave the way) In terms of character design, Yu'er is sometimes a little OOC, and the character design is relatively vague, but the character of the Ninth Prince is quite distinct. All in all, it's okay, no big problem. Combined with the new author, the update is not finished yet, so I will give it five stars first.

In fact, it is really good-looking, the writing is very smooth, there is no messy bloody plot, and the protagonist has a brain. Although there are some twists and turns in life, I personally think it will be he... Pei Yulang is proud, and he is willing to submit to King Xuan because he really has feelings. The two people have feelings... The situation of this book is not very good now. I hope to see the ending (at least there is an outline?

Let me comment after reading it halfway through. The writing is already very good, the narration is clear, and the storyline is relatively compact. The areas that need to be improved are the emotional development. The Ninth Prince can be motivated by lust, and it cannot just be lust. You have to write how he fell in love with the little girl. Pei's, otherwise he would look like a gangster. Xiao Pei's character is not fully portrayed. He keeps a distance from everyone and is very rigid. Only the Ninth Prince ran away as soon as he was kidnapped. You have to describe it a little bit. There must be some reasons for this kind of preference and this kind of double standard. In fact, writing the story to tell the story clearly is already more than half of the success. I think it will be more exciting if the character portrayal and emotional processing are better. I have read more than sixty chapters. If the ending improves, I will write a review again.

Super super pretty! ! The text is great and the plot is super awesome! I'm already fantasizing about the white hair behind Jin Jin [adoration][adoration][adoration][adoration][adoration][adoration][adoration][adoration][adoration][adoration][adoration]

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I guess it will be tortured later, but soon after it starts to appear, the meat is so fragrant, I like to find it in tomatoes 🥩

It's super pretty, but I don't know if Pei Jiu wore it.

It's good, witty, vivid characters, humorous language, details, dialogues, and descriptions. It's pretty good, and you can get into it. 🤣🤣

Good, good, good, good The content of the plot is quite good, but sometimes the transitions in the plot are abrupt and there is no connection at all.

The plot is compact and beautiful! Occasionally, you need to adapt to the sudden transition [laughing and crying] It's a pity that I didn't talk about recovering my memory at the end. I didn't expect that there would be a childbirth plot in the final episode, which was quite unexpected! All in all, it has a happy ending and makes you feel physically and mentally comfortable reading it. Strengthening the literary and musical star descends to the earth, I think we can make a full-length novel about Three Lives and Three Worlds [laughing] The author must remember to promise to give Li Feiyi a single book!