I Only Wanted to Be a Nobody, but Became the Sword Ancestor's First Disciple

Both the setting and the storyline are very reasonable and great. It's just that the lyrical part is a bit too much, and it seems a bit awkward. The purpose of narrating the article from a third-person perspective is to facilitate the rationalization of the spatial structure and make the story arrangement easier to control. If you don't want to lose money from this perspective, a more reasonable approach should be to show various details instead of giving a straightforward description: how unfortunate Lanzhou is, how lacking of love she is psychologically, and how lonely the master is. One or two straightforward statements can play a role in exaggerating, but if you talk too much, you will easily feel embarrassed. Emotional changes directly expressed by the author like this are more suitable for the first perspective, such as: "They are as pure and warm as the sun. I am so despicable... Am I really suitable to stand with them?" Lanzhou self-denied time and time again, and friends and masters slowly penetrated him. Finally, Lanzhou reached a process of denial, anger, negotiation, compromise, acceptance and tolerance of his own shortcomings. Logically speaking, using the first person can better achieve emotional output and allow readers to experience empathy. If you want to use the third person, a better method would be to control the details. For example, "Seeing the happy scene of her friends, Lanzhou unconsciously tightened her fingers. When someone noticed Lanzhou's silence, she quickly put on a suitable smile." It may be better to use more descriptions like this in my opinion.

I really like the relationship between Qing Yan and Lan Zhou. This book is completely written on my heart [blowing kiss]

Overall, the detailed handling of an intuitive emotional description is great, and I rarely cry because of the emotional description. Ah, it's really rare. Anyway, I quite like this one, even though I'm originally more of a cute double male protagonist. Of course, I don't hate the love between a man and a woman. It's just that when I read Bunker, I usually read comics and rarely read novels, but this one is an exception. I was able to finish it. Come on, keep writing, I love you. (*๓´╰╯`๓)♡

The writing is very good, why are there no book reviews? The general plot is: the heroine died in modern times due to a serious illness. She traveled to the world of immortal cultivation. The original owner was Tu Cun, and then died, and then a series of stories unfolded. The villains in the article should be the radicals of Tianyimen and the new aristocrats of the demon clan. They are a master-disciple relationship, a shy teacher with a male mother + a frivolous and high-IQ protagonist (not that frivolous) No loss in investment

I was attracted by the catalog. How should I put it? The writing style needs to be improved [exploration] [exploration] [exploration]. The description of emotions and the portrayal of characters are still not delicate enough [thinking]. Then there is the problem of environmental description. The writing style is... Rough? Not too mature? A success. The description of the environment should give people a vivid effect on the paper, but the description of the environment in this article makes it impossible for me to construct a specific picture in my mind... There is also the master's feelings for Lan Zhou, which is also a personal issue of mine. I think people cannot at least not like the children raised by themselves. Son [palms face], not to mention the master and the apprentice, aren't they going against Tiangang? There are many elders who support or even bring it together [what], the world of cultivation is open... As for their relationship... Emm I don't know where it started? Will it end in one go? Hiss... So I'm here to leave a footprint, and I don't intend to. I've continued reading, but some people like to read it. I respect their preferences and won't make too many comments... I'm not saying that the writing is not good, it's just a matter of personal acceptance [face covering]... I don't understand anything, so I won't make any comments anymore. I hope the author can write better and better, please come on [Sending Hearts]

I really like Master so much. This is one of my favorite books about cultivating immortals. I love you so much, Master. Boy mom, the character of the protagonist really touched my heart. Ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh no I love it so much. I can't express my inner excitement even if I give it five stars.

The parts I saw were pretty good, though. I love Ju Lei master and apprentice, especially the girl is smaller and the boy is bigger. It gave me such a strong sense of déjà vu that I fell in love with my adoptive father. Apart from this, I don't have any highlights at the moment. It seems like a group portrait? Generally speaking, the team members seem to be group portraits, and it just so happens that your side is also updating. When I stop falling in love with master and apprentice, I can still read this book. I guess it will be finished just in time, and I will be so happy. When there is a tweet, I will help push it, at least. Except that Master is the male protagonist. I don't have any clues. I am willing to be happy! By the way, just keep writing, just at the current pace. As long as it doesn't collapse in the later writing. 9.6+ Is not a problem.

It's okay, very realistic. The heroine is cold and wise, and many social realities are shown in many places in the novel. Compared with most mindless love stories in female videos, this book is obviously more practical and rational. Life is not love. Compared with feelings, the interests behind the relationship between two people are more important. Approaching based on interests is obviously to be more responsible for oneself, make risk assessments, and know how to advance and retreat, which will bring great benefits to oneself. Anyway, it is both rational and emotional. However, I think the bigger problem is that the emotional transition in the article is a bit abrupt, the plot arrangement is a bit messy, and there are too many lyrical words, which makes it feel like it is just on the surface. The more lyrical thing is to pay attention to the details, which is just an auxiliary and needs a little icing on the cake.

After reading it for a few days, I finally finished it. Although there are not many emotional lines, the heroine is absolutely rational and sober. Some parts of it made me burst into tears. Especially the heroes who sacrificed their lives during the war between immortals and demons. It made me know that the world of immortal cultivators is not as shameless as most of the subjects. The cultivators here are full of righteousness for the people behind them, all living beings. I circle Master Xu. It is so touching. From the young boy Long Aotian at the beginning, he transformed into a hero who fights for the sect and for the weak people behind him. Everyone has their own experience and growth. It's so touching. Although I really want him to survive, maybe that is the best destination for Master Xu. He firmly accomplished what he wanted in his heart [I almost cried]

Because it is a group portrait sweet article, but it turned out to be a dagger 😭 I had a cardiac arrest when senior sister was stabbed. I like senior brother Yan Xu very much. He is super reliable and can make jokes with Lan Zhou. Lan Zhou's extreme rationality will also be worn out by everyone's love. Xu Qing is an awkward little cute hahahaha. The one who is upset must be Xu Yuetian... The high-spirited young man died on the eve of Lan Zhou's return. It's still so sad! ! I think he doesn't need to die, but he also let everyone's opinions about the sect dissipate... He is finally free, the young man, the wife is awesome. Lan Zhou may have given a little boost to the growth of my friends. Is it to make them better face her departure? The love line can be poked and poked, and the long flow of water is also happiness, so everyone can always see each other.