Lotus-Born Pill Venerable

The plot is good, the content is good, everything is good, but I have three points to say: 1. The content is too cliche. The female protagonist is a powerful person like other novels, and then the male protagonist pursues it. I feel that it is too licking the dog. 2. The structure of the heroine's character is not very detailed. Let's sort out the plot. The small mountain village got in touch with Tilian due to chance, and then entered the lower realm sect, entered the epiphany and met the heroine in the inner sect, and then began to pursue her without even holding her hand. Then the heroine was taken to the upper realm by the sect master, and the memory was blocked, and then the male protagonist pursues without hesitation. Then the heroine's words in the article are of the kind of inaction, and the emotions are not very rich. When it comes to dual cultivation, there is not much emotion. 3. This is my personal feeling. The plot is too depressing, the time is too fast, the plot is tight, and the male protagonist has been chasing and finding the female protagonist. Personally, I think we can set aside some time to enrich the male protagonist's plot line, and recruit a male apprentice or something. I also hope that the female protagonist can be more emotional and not so ruthless and inactive. Overall, it's pretty good, except that the male protagonist and the female protagonist spend a little less time together, and when they are together, I feel that the female protagonist is not very emotional, and it feels like the male protagonist is licking her. Another point is to consider that the male protagonist has a brother or something. The kind of friendship between life and death. After all, the road to becoming an immortal is long. Grow together. Not so depressing. The suggestions given are also 3 points. The first female protagonist should be more emotional, the second male protagonist could consider taking on a male disciple or something, and the third male protagonist could have a brother who is a close friend of life and death to cultivate immortality together, hoping it would be less depressing. Of course, the author has written so much, and the plot is not bad, so follow your own ideas. This is also my personal opinion for everyone to read. If you have this type of novel, you can recommend it to me. , Alchemy, it is not necessary to have too many brothers who are life-or-death friends, and it is not necessary to have too many friends to have a lover, and it is not necessary to accept two apprentices. I am commenting as a reader, and the comments may not be very good. The author is upset when he sees it and doesn't like it. You can treat it as invisible, or think that what I said is fart. After all, I can't write novels. Personal comments do not mean that the work is not good. It is limited to everyone's discussion.

The plot of the story is compact, the language is concise, and it is very attractive. Worth a look.

It's a good and very interesting novel about mortals cultivating immortals.

It's so good, it's worth reading this novel

Very, very wonderful, it's the young master.

The plot is very compact and the writing is wonderful. The reason why the article is not long is that the experience in each place usually ends in five or six chapters, which is a bit unfinished! The male protagonist does not engage in ambiguity and has clear goals for the female protagonist. This is very nice! In addition, the setting of this article is also quite novel. I feel that this kind of article would be perfect for animation or TV! Come on, Da Da!

It's so beautiful, and it has a perfect ending. The male and female protagonists finally go to the fairy world together. The male protagonist was an orphan since childhood. He entered the Cangyuan Sect and met the female protagonist, and the gears of fate began to turn. From the beginning to the end of this book, the male protagonist pursues the female protagonist. The identities of the male and female protagonists are not simple, not sadistic, and very interesting. In the process of chasing, I encountered various secret realms and opportunities, improved my cultivation, and found my true identity. The first and middle stages are about chasing the heroine and working hard to improve her cultivation. The later stage is about fighting side by side with the heroine, defeating the evil monster, and then going to the fairy world. The most important thing is to have a perfect ending, which is much better than those endings that are unfinished, unfinished, and hastily ended.

It's pretty, not that mysterious

Not bad, with clear layers and clear conditioning, 5 stars

The writing is clear and the plot is refreshing. Super exciting!