Zhu Xian: The System Activated from the Start, and My Double Pupils Went on a Rampage

Don't know punctuation marks? There are no quotation marks when characters speak, which looks awkward and can be easily misunderstood.

Having double pupils is the path to invincibility, so why borrow another person's bones?

When you update, subtle flaws will be magnified, and the greenness of the writing will be criticized. When you update twice, a little patience is born, and the progress of the plot is paid more attention to. When you are on the third watch, the little praise starts to sound, and the number of dead harvests starts to decrease. When you update the fifth update, readers' support will spontaneously form, and the voices of praise will become louder and louder. When you are at the tenth watch, the Confucian debates are deafening, and the tolerant attitude is implemented both internally and externally. When you are 20 years old, you will have a place in the bookworm's memories. Even in your long life, your name will leave a dazzling trace. When you are 50 years old, your name will be engraved on the long river of novels, and your mark will not be erased. Your footprints will guide future generations in the streets and seas. Updates may not solve all problems, but more than 90% of problems come from insufficient updates.

The writing is okay, very fluent