Hogwarts: With Heaven-Defying Comprehension, I Forge the Philosopher's Stone

For several days, I haven't figured out what the main character wants to do. There's nothing interesting about it yet. Brother, if you want to overdo it, don't overdo it endlessly as soon as it's released. At least tell us what the main character wants to do. It's hard enough to update it. In the end, I read two chapters of the conversation with the hat in one day. The key point is that I still don't understand what you want to do with the hat.

The purpose of fan fiction is to change some things and save some regrets. If you don't have any skills, you might as well just read the original work.

In fact, I still think that in the original work, Nicoléme and his wife were willing to die. Nicoléme's physical condition during Grindelwald's time was such that he could break his bones just by shaking his hand. If he still wanted to live, he would be like the person who was made immortal by Zeus in the Greek mythology. His bones were gone and his body was covered with flesh, and he was looking forward to his own death.

I feel like there's too much nonsense in the first few chapters after it's released. I want to see the protagonist show off after going to Hogwarts, instead of sitting at home and showing off to two old people. Moreover, it's still an old problem. He's invincible before school starts. I'll see how you write it later.

I don't think there's anything bad about the Dumbledore family. Anyone who has read the original novel knows that Lao Deng's family is a complete tragedy. His sister was seen by Muggles at the age of 67 and what happened was not told. In short, the sister went crazy with a pen and the magic riot was uncontrollable. Mom and her family moved to the valley to take care of her sister. At this time, Lao Deng was 8 years old and his sister was 14. When I was young, I didn't get a timely response because I asked Mommy for something. A magic burst occurred and Mommy died. HP's basic logic is that the magic burst requires extreme emotions to cause death, which is the ultimate murderous intention. That is, my sister wanted to kill Mommy with murderous intent over a trivial matter. At this time, Lao Deng was 16. After that, Aberforth stopped going to school and took care of his sister at home, thinking that her sister was just a mistake. However, only Lao Deng, a genius with rich theoretical knowledge, knew that it was a magical riot with murderous intent, but he could not say anything. Later, he met Grindelwald and vented his feelings. The two fell in love. Aberforth believed that Grindelwald deceived and abducted Lao Deng.

I only read two chapters and didn't even finish the second one. The most interesting thing about the first chapter is that the setting of turning stone into gold was changed. I really don't understand what you mean by changing this? Are you afraid that the protagonist is too rich and wants to overwhelm your financial resources? It doesn't make sense. Your protagonist's background determines that the protagonist will never be short of money in his life. Nick Flamel himself is rich as a country. There is no point or necessity in pressing. This setting was changed in an unflattering way, giving people the feeling that the author is being smart. Chapter 2 says that the White Devil wants to use the Philosopher's Stone to persuade Nick and his wife. What's even more confusing is that the author doesn't even know this setting, so it's hard for people to believe what will happen if he lets himself go later. Good luck.

Alchemists make money selling fake gold? You poisoned me to death. Precious potions have a price but no market. Give an example. In World of Warcraft, there is only a giant who can make mixtures. Which one is not worth a million? Will those who play alchemy be short of money?

How to say it? I feel like the author underestimated this first alchemist a bit. Don't say that he has no strength. After more than 600 years of accumulation, he doesn't even know how far his alchemy has reached. Everyone knows that he has lived for 600 years and has wealth. If he doesn't have any strength, it will be a ghost. Not to mention a person who has lived for 600 years, how can he not know the importance of strength? There must be many people who have been greedy for wealth in the past 600 years, but how many of them dare to find fault?

You're not good at writing about people's mentality. It feels a bit redundant. Please change the conditions for the golden finger! The rest is very well written!!!

Give me some encouragement! No tickets, no rewards, no data required. Just tell me what brings you to this moment. So tired. The more I revise the article, the more confused I become.