DanMachi: Starting with the Goddesses Raising Me Online!

Explanation of the release of magic power Within the site, I've already been labeled a "cloud dog" by many readers, but I still can't help but explain when I see Type-Moon related content. In Type-Moon, releasing magical energy is a very high-level skill. Normally, magic that uses magic to enhance the body is called enhancement magic. In Fate/stay night, Rin Tohsaka used it, allowing her, whose body is not beyond human limits, to jump several stories high and shatter a rock with a single punch. What's the point of releasing magic power? Why bother with magic power release when we already have enhancement magic? The answer is simple: the multiplier is different. Enhancing magic by five or ten times is already quite remarkable, but the enhancement multiplier of magic power release is hundreds or even thousands of times. On the verge of death, Minamoto no Yorimitsu used his magic to unleash a single attack that shattered a mountain. Karna and Arjuna, who unleashed their full magic without regard for cost, each of their casual attacks within ten minutes surpassed the power of the two things that had exploded in Japan. Secondly, regarding its nature, Arjuna's "Magic Release" is followed by the word "fire," which seems simple—just that his magic is fire-attributed. However, the skill description states that Arjuna's Magic Release utilizes the divine power of the god of fire. The level of Magic Release and divine power are at the same rank; changing it to the power of a different deity only alters the attribute.

"Please, help Hestia." Even the most steadfast heroine, facing the most arduous and difficult challenges, shed two tears. She raised her head and, with all her remaining strength, uttered those words: "I'll do anything for you." Freya's smile grew even wider. She slowly rose, her bare feet treading across the cold floor, each step feeling like stepping on Rhodes's heartbeat. "So—" The thin fabric fell with a casual wave of her hand, revealing her delicate collarbone and smooth shoulders. "I won't stand on ceremony." Freya's fingertips slid down Rhodes' chin, across his neck, like a snake testing the temperature of its prey. Rhodes froze, his body screaming to escape, but his feet felt nailed to the floor—he couldn't run; behind him lay Hestia's precarious future. With a sweet scent of roses and musk, Freya's lips landed on the hollow of his collarbone, leaving a moist mark. Rhodes jerked his head back, his skull slamming against a stone pillar. A dull pain mixed with a sharper sense of shame surged through him. He instinctively reached out to push her away, but Freya gently grabbed his wrist and pressed it above his head. "It's too late to back out now..." Freya sneered. She had been planning this day for a long time, so how could she stop so easily? Her knee pressed against Rhodes's legs, invading Rhodes's territory inch by inch. "Hmm..." Two burning bodies began to intertwine in the palace, their suppressed breaths echoing in the empty temple like the whimpers of a trapped beast on the verge of death. "Squeak..." A side door to the temple had opened a crack at some point, and Rhodes' pupils constricted sharply—Hestia was standing there, staring blankly at the panel in front of her. "Mood: 9⬇100 (Despair)" Energy: 95⬇00 (Full of energy) "Health: 98/100 (Excellent)" "For Hestia, Rose gave up her virginity. Although she was unwilling, her body experienced pleasure that Hestia had never given her before." "Rhodes has mastered the skill of serving." "Serving: LV1" "Realizing his inner turmoil, Rhodes felt disgusted with himself and his affection for Hestia increased." Hestia stood frozen like a statue in the shadows of the door crack, her heart filled with indescribable emotions. In that instant, a myriad of thoughts surged within her, impossible to suppress. She would never again hear or see the sounds and bustle of the world, and she would surely have to abandon the time they had spent together. If she were an ordinary adventurer, it wouldn't matter, but she is a genuine god. How could she bear the blow of her child selling his body to Freya for her sake? And now, this blow, which no one could bear, did not defeat her. She remained unharmed, and when she turned around, she still walked straight. "Get some rest." He stared wide-eyed at the crack of the door that had closed again; the sound of the door shut shattered Rhodes' last bit of strength to struggle. Freya chuckled softly, leaned down to his cheek, and greedily licked away the tears from the corner of his eyes with the tip of her tongue.

To be honest, your plot about changing sects is like a joke. Giving the male lead the opportunity to meet other goddesses in order to build a harem is really ruining the whole plot. There are clearly other ways to solve this problem, but you chose one that is not very comfortable to the senses. It's not that fancy tricks are bad, but could you make the plot more logically sound?

This is a pretty good DanMachi fanfic, but the biggest problem is—the punctuation! The punctuation! The punctuation is just so bizarre! Please, author, stop breaking coherent sentences into multiple paragraphs. It's a terrible habit and completely hinders reading. #(Crying) Sometimes I can't even tell if it's a pause in speech... Or the next person speaking. If you want to indicate a pause, you can use the "..." Symbol. There's no need to break it down into segments. Sometimes, the logic behind segmenting speech is completely unclear and doesn't seem like a normal reading habit.

Doesn't Dracula have stamina potions? Why didn't anyone think to buy some?

I heard that the author of DanMachi said that the Black Dragon is scheduled to appear one year after the main story. If that's true, then all the characters who write DanMachi fanfiction now would need to be at least level 10 within a year. After all, Bell reached LV5 in just six months.

To be honest, it seems like the gods in DanMachi who descend to the mortal realm don't really study powers. For example, Hestia, as the goddess of the hearth, would probably earn more money cooking than other jobs. And Mikuri Raijin could easily open a martial arts training school, whether it's for beginners or advanced learners—both could make a lot of money.

As one reader said, your punctuation really has a big problem. Like, so, You think so, Typing makes you feel good. But for readers, this reading experience is really terrible.

How long are you planning to write about Apollo? Two weeks and you're still not finished? It's already making me lose all desire to continue reading.

It's alright. I've finished reading it so far. The main character's personality has basically been established, and the fate of the little people's Lily is acceptable as a secondary interpretation. I found Lily incredibly disgusting in the original work. Other aspects are entertaining. Basically, it still comes down to the Bull God. I still hope that the Bull God and the main character have a relationship first.