Crossovers: Your Youth Is All Wrong

First of all, you're writing a web novel, which requires logic. You completely misunderstand the impact of all the victims retaining memories of their murders. In the eyes of those victims, the protagonist is a serial killer who brutally murdered them, and their only response is to observe and search for evidence? These people would be desperate to eliminate you; they'd fabricate a charge against you even if you weren't guilty, or hire the underworld to drown you in Tokyo Bay. How can they be at ease until you're dead? The fact that the victims retain their memories is a complete blunder. Secondly, is the protagonist even human?! An ordinary person in a city struggles to kill a chicken, yet this protagonist is a born serial killer?! He transmigrates once and can kill without batting an eye, accepting all kinds of gory and restricted scenes, and then using cruel methods to kill? Even a typical serial killer is extremely flustered the first time they kill someone. Is this protagonist even human? And what is the protagonist's motivation? The benefits are so low, just a tiny boost to physical abilities, while the costs are so huge—his social relationships are practically destroyed. I have to say again, retaining the reincarnation memories is a complete blunder. With such low benefits and such high costs, why continue? Does the protagonist just do whatever the system tells him to do, without any independent thought? Furthermore, this is a light novel. What's so interesting about watching a serial killer slaughter a bunch of teenagers? If you're focused on Detective Conan, using this ghost story system to play an anti-hero like Jigsaw, somewhere between good and evil, and judging the villains might be quite interesting. One-sided, inexplicable, and meaningless massacres of innocent people is just... F***ing, okay?

Ultimately, the reward is too meager. After killing so many female protagonists and working so hard for so long, the only reward is a slight physical enhancement. What's the point? You're saying that killing a bunch of people can earn you superhuman-level power-ups, then readers would definitely be interested. Or, after the mission, all the characters' fear of the protagonist could be converted into favorability, which would also be satisfying for readers. The problem is that all this description of how the protagonist kills, spending months planning and acting, only to get some physical power-ups in the end—since the timeline will reset anyway—he might as well have gone into the stock market or futures market and been financially independent and enjoying life.

To be honest, the only reward the protagonist gets after offending everyone is physical enhancement, which is disproportionate to the effort. Moreover, it makes those people hate him completely. In reality, there are hundreds of ways to get rid of him. After all, he is a mass murderer in the simulation. In reality, wouldn't they try every means to kill him first?

To put it bluntly, the protagonist is a serial killer named Jiahao. In the first arc, he even wrote a social Darwinist essay, which showed his arrogance and conceit. However, what he actually did was bully ordinary people using his superpowers. Even so, when killing Yukino, he didn't instill complete fear in her or demonstrate overwhelming power. The effect was horribly weak. I just want to ask, did Hachiman and Yukino really have such a good relationship with the protagonist? You mean they just chatted a few times and exchanged a few pleasantries, and they became good friends, even wanting to change their ways after being killed? Are you kidding me? It's already incredible that they could become friends at that level. And if they still wanted to change their ways after the first arc, I don't think the characters here should be so saintly as to think about others after being killed, especially when the protagonist is ruthless and heartless towards them, a complete monster.

To be frank, from the first chapter onwards, whether it's removing the conflict elements, detaching the story from the school setting, and bringing the supernatural powers into the open to create an invincible narrative, or directly confronting the victims in the latest chapter, the author hasn't made a single correct decision.

Just finished watching Yukinoshita and got killed, so I'm here to give my review. The excessive interference from comments hastened the plot. Yukino should have developed better relationships within the Service Club to highlight the drama of her murder. Yukino's character development in this aspect is far inferior to Hachiman's, and she doesn't deserve the title of "the most delicious prey."

The writing is terrible, but the premise is creative. The writing is like that of a middle or high school student—it can't evoke any emotion whatsoever. I subscribed for a novelty, but the logic is utterly absurd. The crime-solving logic is based on the protagonist using the Seven Warlords of the Sea as a reference. Who can stand that? It's an insult to intelligence.

Now I understand what "Divine Dragon Transformation Zone" means. It turns out it became a zone later on.

It appears: when the protagonist is the murderer, the protagonist's unique ability to detect enemies in the void appears. The protagonist is dressed normally while shopping. Caught on some cameras For: I noticed three problems as soon as I watched the video. #(Vomit)#(vomit)#(vomit)

Could you please remove the main character and replace him with someone else?