Douluo's Heavenly Master

I read three of your Douluo novels, the first one is extremely poisonous, the second one is small poisonous, this one is still small poisonous, why don't you make progress? Your old habit is to make martial arts too mysterious and messy. Today's novels are not what they were a few years ago. In the past, the protagonist wished that the same item had ten functions, but now it's annoying to look at it, so it's better to keep it simple. The martial soul can attack, defend and assist, and is developed in all directions, but you really dare not manage this second soul ring poorly, and absorb the energy of the soul beast. It is really ugly, impure, and too complicated.

The author sincerely recommends that you have some patience when writing fanfics. You can write slowly but don't make mistakes all the time. You started out as the male protagonist and it was already level 1.7. After a few chapters, it was said that the male protagonist was level 1.6. It said that the male protagonist's first level of movement has been completed. When the male protagonist came out of the Star Dou Forest, he said that the male lead's first level was almost completed🤗 To be honest, there are too many mistakes. There are also elements of the Celestial Master. Since you have used the talisman as the subject, you must also understand the knowledge of Taoism. The male protagonist's thousand-character score, just those few sentences repeated over and over again, is really interesting. The story you wrote is actually quite good. The male protagonist is not Long Aotian, and there is no system. It is actually very comfortable to watch step by step. It is just that the details I mentioned above are not handled well. It seems to be no different from Douluo Dalu 1. The details are not handled as well as the third young master of the Tang family. I hope you will change it after reading it. Of course, the book is indeed very nice.

The sky is dead, the yellow sky should stand, and the age of Jiazi will be good for the world. Thunder Lord help me! ! !

The heroine won't be Huo Wu, right? I don't really like the arrogance of the other party. That agreement feels like everyone is rushing to be her boyfriend without even checking whether I am worthy of it.

The setting that the protagonist is a time traveler can be deleted. After time travel, you will not have any advantages, not even jelly grass or anything else. The protagonist's father is a titled Douluo (Tang Hao and Dugu Bo, one of them was killed two against one), but the result is that the protagonist is left to suffer, and everyone who comes over is stepped on, which is purely disgusting for readers. He didn't graduate from junior college, so he went to Soto City to fight for souls. Then he was forced by Flanders to join Shrek, and then let him stick a stick of incense. When he arrived in Tiandou City, he was oppressed by the Titan family again, and even asked the protagonist to hold a stick of incense. The protagonist's father is not like Tang Hao, who has enemies with others. Sword Douluo Ming said that he has killed all his enemies. Just insist on abusing the master.

1. It doesn't look like a time-traveler scene. The protagonist is confused about martial arts, subsequent goals, and where to develop. It's okay for Wuhun to be a little ignorant, but the other time travelers are running into obstacles everywhere. And a fairy grass? Such an important factor in Douluo is ignored. No matter who wants to become stronger, as long as this concept is there, it is impossible not to look for opportunities. It feels like there is no planning at all, and no in-depth thinking. If you do this, you might as well not write about time travellers, and pretend you don't know anything, then there will basically be no problem. 2. Since the author wrote about the butterfly effect, please be more serious. Sometimes there will be some, and sometimes there won't be. Anyway, it's not a big event, so just forget about it. The key is to start the Soul Master Competition. Without Dugu Bo, Tang San would not be able to have the fairy grass. In this case, how could Tang San reach level 40? How about the fourth ring of ten thousand years? Even other teammates can have level 40? Not to mention Zhu Zhuqing is level 40? Have you figured out the level of the original Zhu Zhuqing without the fairy grass? I've read a lot of fanfics, and at this point in time, the levels are basically copied from the originals. Regardless of whether there's ambrosia or not, they're basically the same. I really admire them. Author, when you wrote about the Butterfly Effect, please have a beginning and an end. It's such a big loophole. Not to mention other opportunities, there are only two places on the Douluo Continent of the three major wonders, and one is on the Sun and Moon Continent. Another one, wouldn't they be able to write if they don't give them four rings?

I hope the heroines are not Ning Rongrong and Zhu Zhuqing. Most of Qian Renxue's Douluo fans are these heroines. I'm tired of watching it, I hope the author can create a heroine of his own

In the previous book, Peerless Tang Sect is chasing after you, come on!

I haven't watched the paid content, so I won't rate it. The plot is reasonable and the rhythm is dark. It would be better to take the fanfic in a lighter direction. When I activated the first rune after meeting Xiao Wu, I thought it would be a harem joke. After practicing alone and starting to encounter Hu Liena's second rune, I think the possibility is very high. Rabbit - Wind, Fox - Control, Cat - Dark, Liuli - Tiangang, Shui Bing'er - Bing. , Fire Dance - Fire, when I finished my brain supplement and was still thinking about what the remaining three were, after watching the Soto City branch line, I realized that it was impossible to join the group, and I was thinking that the Shrek Three Beauties had no chance. Then the plot started to get a little bit poisonous, and it became almost endless. Daihu eunuch, Er Ming was killed by his father, and then he paid, and he had no desire to pursue it. It's just that the change between friend and foe is too sudden. In Star Dou Town, both parties have known each other. Xiao Wu and Tang San have been classmates for 6 years. Although the protagonists have left, they have only been friends for a few years. You can speak rudely and take action against people you have only known for a few days. This is unacceptable. It is too blunt. It happens to be stuck when you have to pay, so you can simply stop watching it. It will not be fun and there will be nothing to look forward to. His father's heavenly book martial arts spirit has been passed down from generation to generation, and it seems to be more harsh than Jiuxin. It can only be awakened after the last one dies. I boldly predict that his father's power to sacrifice to the sky is boundless, especially when he vomited blood when killing Erming, it is probably a foreshadowing. The theme of "Bye Bye" is great, but I don't like watching it.

The most rubbish fan fiction is your kind, where you have to create a bunch of original characters to surround the protagonist😑