Fantasy Version of Douluo

There is no reason for the low rating. The fantasy world is all about personal power. If a family story is well written, the main character develops first and then leads the whole family. This is what makes the story attractive. I have read several famous books about family cultivating immortality, and without exception, the protagonists stand out, the supporting characters have a certain presence, and the family has gone through various ups and downs. Not to mention that your protagonist is brilliant, he doesn't even have much sense of existence, and there is no outstanding theme at all. Internet articles are all written around a center. Most of this center is the protagonist, or a few people in the protagonist group. In family stories, it only takes a few people to shine. You are too far away from the center, a bunch of irrelevant descriptions, very procrastinating.

The author's framing is good, but it is too big. Without the support of fans in the early stage, it will be difficult to support it in the later stage. In one, the author talks about group portraits. Let me express my opinion. I read too many titles from one to nine, and I seem to want to skip it directly. Basically I only want to see a few useful people. One more question. The author of this article did not have any cool points before it was put on the shelves, which will make those who read the cool articles write it off. If you want the horse to run, you must first have grass. Too many layouts will make some readers of Shuangwen feel impatient. The main reason I want to say is that the author does not have old fans in the early stage. There are no interpretations and comments from old fans. Some new people who come to read Shuangwen will be impatient when they see these long-winded layouts. No matter how many great authors layout things in the front, no one will find it annoying. Author, you need to think clearly. You wrote this fanfic and others read your title because it felt enjoyable and nostalgic. At present, some layouts can be summarized in one sentence and are not important, but if you explain too much, the group portraits will appear bland and tasteless. Of course, it depends on how you exert strength while sitting in the later stage. Let's look forward to it a little now!

Let me answer a few of your questions. First, regarding the previous issue of too many settings. My original idea was to embody the elite education of a well-known family, divided into two aspects: civil and military. The aspect of martial arts is the five inheritances of the Chen family, the best family in the world - mind, body, eyes, mind, and skills. They are the Zhongzheng Sword Qi Technique, Sword Shadow Body, Star Sword Eyes, Seven Kills Qi Condensation Technique, and Seven Sword Control Techniques. In addition, there are three years of medicinal bathing starting at the age of three to strengthen the body and practice basic martial arts. The literary aspect is a lot of cognitive education. The Chen family is a famous family. The families in this article all have inheritance. From the age of 6 to 12, when they are laying the foundation, they all study in their own junior school. There is no need to go out to study. Cognitive education reflects the knowledge of the soul master system, soul master training paths (i. E. Classification, seven in total), historical secrets, personal connections, vassal power, economic strength, cultural inheritance, family influence, and even family back-up. During this period, I often rationalized the inaccuracies in the original work and crazily filled in the holes. Many people regard the cognitive education of the protagonist as a setting. They skip it because they don't like it, and then say that there is no protagonist. The core of "Dou Yi" is love. Therefore, there is a big villain Wuhun Palace, several development places Nottingham, Shrek, Killing City, Poseidon Island, several alliances Sanshangzong, two royal families, and the Blacksmith Association. Others, no more, the circle is very small, so the total number of soul masters is not high, one hundred thousand. The main body of this book is development. Aristocratic families want to develop, sophistication of people, intrigues, love and hatred, so the circle must be large enough. There are a large number of forces including the big villain Crimson Church, the Three Imperial Families of the Tie Guan Alliance, the Twelve Families of the Great Soul Fighting Arena, competing interests, and the Wuhun Palace, as well as neutral organizations. Therefore, there are 8 super powers, 60 top powers, and hundreds of first-class powers. Therefore, a Douluo Jianghu appeared. In the article, Douluo Continent covers an area of ​​55 million square kilometers, the same as Eurasia, and has a population of 1.5 Billion, which is not much. At a ratio of one thousandth, there are 1.5 Million soul masters. Because of the dimensionality of the world, it has now grown to 2.2 Billion or 2 million. At a ratio of 0.1‰, There are more than 200 titled Douluo. Because it is an aristocratic family, it is a family story and a group portrait story. There are dozens of people from four generations, a large number of branches (33 branches), and follower families (the Zhaowu 13th surname of the inner nine families, the outer four families, and dozens of other middle and lower families), and a group portrait appears. So far, the names of people who have appeared in light have reached thousands. Except for the thirty or forty chapters of Liuguangpo's Wolf-Slaying War, which are group portraits, the other thousands of chapters are from the perspective of the protagonist. Second, there is the issue of the protagonist's young age. I don't know why everyone must follow the time points of leaving home at 12 and becoming an adult at 18. Tang San is free-range, in junior college from 6 to 12 years old, there is nothing to write home about. But in this book, the protagonist belongs to the best family in the world, so there is too much to write about. At the age of 6, the protagonist experienced a war that wiped out his family. At the age of 9, he traveled to the mainland and experienced two wars. At the age of 10, he became the family's economic and management minister, in charge of the family's economic development. At the age of 13, he officially became the young master of the Chen family. He grows to 1.7 Meters tall, is a level 57 Soul King, and has the combat power of a Soul Saint. There is a developing protagonist group and thousands of soul masters under his command, so why bother with the nominal age? During this period, the protagonist's knowledge and psychological age of the previous life showed a thorough wisdom, even evil, from the perspective of Douluo Continental people. Moreover, the 18-year-old adult is in the Blue Star Celestial Dynasty, but the Douluo Continent is in the medieval background. Could you please go earlier? After so many chapters, being young means having a lot of experience. Third, there is the problem of system cheats. The goal of this book, just like the title of the book, is to overturn the world of gods, at least to resist the 2,000 gods headed by the five god kings. Even if the protagonist becomes a god, conspiracy theory can't do it. As long as the opponent's IQ is online, I can't do it no matter what. Therefore, become an immortal. Therefore, you need a golden finger and a lottery machine that focuses on fairy style. The origin will be introduced later. In the current lottery, except for the heroine Shao Siming Xiaoyi, the rest are all exercises, martial arts, and items. They are all things used by martial arts and cultivators.

It's too watery. It's fine if you divide it into chapters, but the plot progress is really very slow. To summarize, 😓😓😓😓

After reading the first twenty chapters, how should I put it, the protagonist of this book does not exist at all, or the entire family is the protagonist. The author has wasted too long on writing the family framework, which makes people very anxious because he has not yet entered the main text. I ran away after reading three or four chapters without any patience. According to me, there was too much nonsense. The author didn't understand who the protagonist was. You didn't write the family story like that. The beginning of the article should be fascinating and find a way to attract everyone to read slowly and gradually get into the theme, rather than just writing the framework to make it feel extremely dull and boring. The protagonist is not like the protagonist, the supporting characters are not supporting characters, and the family story is not that complete. Messy. No matter what you learn later is interesting, if what you write in the front is boring, no one will read this book! As for hunting the first soul beast, I don't even know what you want to express? There are a lot of unimportant words, and no one can understand what you want to express. This is the problem. Now that I have written more than 200 chapters, it is useless for me to make suggestions now. At this point, I hope the author can set up a post to tell everyone what the article is about, or recommend jumping from there to get to the point. I have a feeling it will be very good. I estimate that the next two hundred chapters will be 80% nonsense and 20% theme!

Update quickly. Update quickly. Update quickly.

Either come out sooner or not have a system. I originally felt that the writing was very good and many things were analyzed very well. Personally, I feel that the original map is too small. Here, many problems have been analyzed and it is very reasonable. However, in Chapter 31, a system-drawn character appeared. I can't stand it.

First of all, I guess there are two general directions for the Chen family group in the future. One is to go in the direction of a hidden family and deal with it as a sect on the surface; the other is that the family encounters irresistible factors and major changes when the protagonist is around or in his mid-twenties. (Personally, I prefer the first one) Secondly, the uncertainty factor about Tang San in the future should be quite troublesome and not easy to write about. My idea is that it is best to change Tang San's own concept step by step without being too specific, and guide Tang San to become an ordinary soul master. Later, if Tang San has the ability, he can just get a priest or a god of any level. In the end, I feel that the characterization of each character does not need to be as mindless and shady as other fics, giving away girls without brains, taking in harems and so on, just falling in love with a girl, and it is not a matter of sperms, so it is completely unnecessary; the author's characterization is also pretty good, it shouldn't be too outrageous. I hope the author will think more about his own plot in the following plots (I personally feel that the book "Douluo: Survive to the Finale" is okay, the middle part is okay, the characters at the beginning and the end are not emotionally harmonious), and the age of the characters. How long the age can only live at that stage must be considered. I don't know how many people there are in Douluo. An Yuan's book said that there are only a dozen titles in mainland China, so this ratio It's too little. I hope there won't be so many bans in the future. My guess is that innate level eight should be the threshold for banning, and it's not necessarily the kind of breakthrough. There is only a possibility of banning, which should be about 60%. Normal development at level nine is no problem, and at level ten, the 99 limit (peerless) should be about 100 years old, and there is barely a 10 to 30% chance of becoming a god (some novels say that the title can be banned for 300 years, one year) Level plus 100 years, I'm not sure, the breakthrough after level 95 may not be able to break through for decades or hundreds of years. I hope that if it is a supporting role in the back, there is no need to improve too outrageously) As for those who are below the eighth level of innateness without the opportunity of fairy grass, don't even think about it. It is impossible to get a title. Anyone who has cultivated to the peak of 89 Contra should be alive in a few years or more than ten years. Also, every starting point Pay attention to the speed of cultivation. I feel that innate full soul power and level 9 and below are the watershed. As for the god-level martial soul of level 20, it is even more heavenly punishment (not to mention absolute god-level, there are 80-90% of them, and this kind of continent is not a big cabbage). For the protagonist, it is no problem to level 7 or 8 in one year in the early stage, but it will gradually slow down later. After the soul saint, you have to think carefully and there is no need to worry that 100 years is enough time. There is also the protagonist's own family line, emotional line, friend line, and descendants. It is impossible not to start a family and start a business😄 The above are just my personal thoughts. If you hope you can adopt them, adopt them. The structure must be rigorous. Come on author!

It feels so complicated, but it's okay

It's all about introducing your imagination. The dialogue can fill several chapters, but it's all water.