Urban Mechanical Psychic

I kept reading, and the first picture looked really poisonous to me, especially the part where he was killing people. He knew how to ride the subway, how to flirt with girls, but the senior brother was so clueless. In short, he looked a bit brainless.

Chapter 3, Apprenticeship, the third picture, I couldn't stand what I saw, it was really too poisonous, I found that my poison resistance is still too low, I can't stand it, I suggest you revise the first three pictures, the first three chapters are very important, the writing style, if you don't say it is very good, you must have a below average level! If you really want to write a book that people can read, I suggest that you revise the first 100,000 words. Don't worry, read it twice more yourself, or ask someone you know well to read it twice more and look at it carefully. You can also ask someone for advice on your writing style to help you improve. And I feel that it is really brainless. That senior brother is not very good at cultivating immortals, cultivating life, and cultivating oneself. Cultivation of mind and nature, I feel that his senior brother has not taken advantage of any of them. He is a reckless man with only strength and no brains. As for the little girl who cultivates immortality, I feel that he has only scheming and no strength. He does not have the kind of transcendent mentality that he should have, but only a mentality that is superior to ordinary people. The old man has scheming but no heart and nature. I don't know which part of cultivating immortality you want to describe, the author? But in my opinion, if you continue to write this book like this, it is destined that not many people will read it. If you want to write a cool article or an article without brainstorming, pretend I didn't say it😔, but even if you think of these two points, you will not feel better. Really, the more you read the book, the more it becomes. It gives us a nondescript feeling, and the writing style is really not good, and your detailed description is also not good. It gives me the feeling of a biography, but really, that's all. If you feel angry or something, delete it as you like ヽ('ー`)ノ