The Walking Dead: Rebuilding Civilization

I originally wanted to post two suggestions in the book review for each chapter, but I always make mistakes when using my mobile phone, so I might as well post them in the book review. Point out two shortcomings and one suggestion to the author Disadvantage 1: Use the word "at this time" less or not at all. Things originally happened in the ongoing tense. You can write it down directly, suddenly break the sentence, and then start another section. The beginning of "at this time" will make people pause in the plot when reading. Disadvantage 2: Try not to use the word "then" in the article. If this word appears too much, it will give people the feeling of reading a composition. Suggestions: The author said that this is the first time he writes this, and it can be seen from the writing style that the most important thing in the form of a novel is coherence. It is best if everyone can read it smoothly in one breath. After the author has finished writing, he will read his own work and compare it with other people's works, so that he can clearly know whether it is smooth or not. Don't make your own work look like a composition. The most basic thing that makes novels read smoothly is that you should just write down what you are thinking in your mind. Do not add any words to break up the sentences. Once the sentences are broken, there will be a pause. The more plainly the written sentences are, the more comfortable it will be for people to read.

What I wrote is really not what I said, okay!

What is the skirt size? I know it. Please answer it.

Your story is moving too fast

If zombies are so fast, can they mutate? If zombies are so fast, can they mutate?

Can you do it faster, about 3 chapters a day would be enough

Can you give me a role? Villain Lin Jie male 35 years old Character: bloodthirsty, crazy, violent, rational, Before the end, he was a highly intelligent criminal Endangering society, humans are more dangerous than zombies Intermediate level injected with evolution potion

Author, we all wrote 10 chapters

How is my book? I admit that the punctuation is a problem. What about outside?

Today I discovered that books that have failed the review can be deleted, so I plan to write a new one using this account. If you can, go and show your support.