Doupo: the Destiny Has Arrived, the Five Elements Are Supreme!

Tentative: Ya Fei, Little Medical Fairy, Qing Lin, Zi Yan, Medusa will be added in the subsequent plots depending on the situation. Regarding the issue of the heroine Ya Fei, there is nothing to explain. If you don't like Ya Fei, you don't need to watch it.

So childish! Moreover, the author thinks that someone has saved him, so he unpreparedly hands over some of his secrets, which will only make readers feel poisonous. If you write out the various discriminations, insults, beatings and scoldings that the protagonist encountered when he became a beggar... And let the readers feel that Yafei appeared like white moonlight and experienced something together, if you reveal some secrets at this time, it will make the readers feel that the character is very good. Now in this plot, it feels that the protagonist is as childish as a child of how old. Is the protagonist an aborigine? The time traveler's substitute author is at least twenty years old, in his twenties, so naive? Don't they think you have value and deserve to be nurtured? In the final analysis, it is still interests, but the author believes that this interest relationship is an emotional relationship. I saved a person in difficulty on a whim, but it was just a whim, it was as simple as that.

Time traveler? He is naive and naive. Either the protagonist is a kid with little experience in his previous life, or the author has never seen a kid who has experienced the real dangers of society.

After reading the comment section, it was said that Xiao Yu was screwed over by Xiao Yan, and he also wrote that he was having an affair with the protagonist. I looked up the keyword Xiao Yu, and after a quick look, it was true. It was also written that Xiao Yu was screwed over, and that he was also having an affair with the protagonist. I don't understand the author very well, but my head must be a little green?

Don't say nonsense that I'm not qualified to comment because I haven't watched it for a few minutes. You're such an idiot for writing. Tell me what qualifications I need to be able to comment.

That's shit. If you want to accept Xiao Yu, don't write about Xiao Yan who saw her all. If you don't want to accept her, don't write about her. It's better to write about Xiao Yan who saw her all and then write about her being ambiguous with the protagonist. Do you have any special quirks?

The descriptions of the outer courtyard in the recent hundreds of chapters are too watery! According to this description, if you write hundreds of chapters for each original plot point, including the Inner Courtyard, Yunlan Sect, National War, Black Corner Region, Zhongzhou, Glacier Valley, Danta, etc., Are you planning to start with a thousand chapters? . . Ever since the protagonist left and entered the academy, he has been grinding away in the outer courtyard. Either he was provoked today, or the protagonist pretended to be stupid tomorrow. In terms of content, compared with the previous chapters (the cultivation experience of the Five Elements Spirit Body at the beginning), both the viewing ability and the tension of the plot are full of moisture. So far, the summary of chapters 73-160 is that the protagonist sells elixirs, the protagonist is provoked, and the protagonist is with a beauty! Nearly a hundred chapters have been written. A little disappointed. I hope the author can simplify it a bit later and stop being sloppy! In fact, compared with a million-word intensive book compared to a few million-word hydrology, I personally feel that a book that is not watery will make people read more! How many readers of those books on water can stick to the later chapters?

Chapter 24 is not very well written. Even though there was such a big conflict, you didn't kill him and let him go. If he was honest and didn't dare to cause trouble in the future, you could let him go. However, his facial expression still showed resentment. He was going to cause trouble in the future. You are old and can't get older.

1: The reason why I don't like the system is that the protagonist is just a puppet. Opportunity does not use brain planning, just sends it directly. Ability will not be developed using the brain, but created using the brain, and will be given directly. 2: I don't like novels that start with the second generation of rich people and the cultivation of great emperors. Opportunities will come as they come, they are invincible and have no innovative imagination. If I travel to the world of cultivating immortals, even useless spiritual roots/martial spirits can counterattack and become gods. Plasma (Valkyrie's Tesla), compressed density (brother's black hole nuclear explosion), biological research (Hokage's Orochimaru),... Have you read so many books in vain? Why can others thrive without a system, but what about their brains?

If you flirt but don't accept it, I'll give you a low score in the future!