I Studied Abroad in Modern Times

The author has asked for leave again. I read the message the author wrote at the end and wanted to give the author some comments and suggestions. I have been following it since the first chapter until now, and I have also voted for some monthly votes and recommendation votes. Recently, I feel that the author is obviously not in good condition, and he often fails to write chapters. I personally think that the author's biggest problem is that the plot is multi-faceted and multiple conflicts are launched at the same time, including the court, the old and new parties, Xixia, Shen Kuo's scientific research, cotton cultivation, capital occupation and management, relatives and nobles, the financial war with Liao, the pacification of Jiaozhi, ethnic minorities, immigration... There are countless story lines, and the author does not know which one to focus on. He can catch all of them, but he can't catch them all. It is suggested that the author should calm down, sort out his own plot lines, grasp the main conflicts, and clearly distinguish the main plot and the side plots. Please note that you are not a daily life writer. Some people joked in book reviews that you wrote a chronological novel, which is not unreasonable. The plot is too slow and there are not many exciting conflicts. The further you go, the more you feel like you are reading a true record. The above is just my opinion.

What's the point of writing a good book? I admit that the author has rich historical knowledge and unique insights, but in one chapter there are only a few lines of dialogue between the characters and few lines of story development. It just shows off the author's understanding of history. This is like learning historical knowledge. Although it is very in-depth, it is boring and boring.

How long has the protagonist been there? Haven't grown up yet? At first, I thought it was too much. You, a teenager, have always had your hands in everything. You have done so many things but time has stopped. It is too embarrassing. No matter who you are as a child, you cannot have such magical powers. This is history, and it is not fantasy. It is too embarrassing.

This time, I will never let anyone bully you again... Is the quality of the masters so bad and so vicious now? Are you screening readers in the first chapter?

Garbage, as the Heavenly Khan in the Song Dynasty, what should we do with the large number of foreign races in Liaodong, Hetao, Ningxia, Hexi and Longyou, and keep them for future generations? Wen Yanbo climbs the dragon and attaches himself to the phoenix Chapter title: Wen Yanbo falls in love with the emperor

After 400 chapters, the Queen Mother is still in power, and the protagonist can only influence a little bit of government affairs by acting coquettishly. Is this book going to have 10,000 chapters? Or will the protagonist take charge of the book and end it? Then shouldn't the protagonist be the Queen Mother?

It looks good, but won't the plot progress be accelerated? He is still in his teens and still has several years to go before taking office, which is too late.

The beginning is very comfortable. Just watch it. Isn't this the Song Dynasty version of I want to be the emperor? It's a complete mess... I planned to let the Forbidden Army do the project, but I talked about it for two chapters. The key is that you often say something about me and don't say anything. You say I'm stupid...

At first I thought that the two palaces were in power to make a transition, but the result has always been the same. The title of the book is simply called The Young Emperor. It looks really boring.

Although this book is about the Song Dynasty, and there are no problems with allusions, the complex sentences have too few words and are too symbolic. It often takes 200 words to write a concept, and using 20 words to intuitively express the emotional meaning is completely superficial. On the surface, I suggest that you learn more about Qin Li's writing style. It should be short if it should be short, and it should be long if it is long. It is too symbolic and only uses prepositions to connect it. Although it is a common way of writing online articles, to achieve a good work, relying on this "English" grammar is not feasible.