Devouring Source World
by Tomato Tomato Egg Fried Rice
About This Novel
I really like the novels I Eat Tomatoes, especially Swallowing the Starry Sky. I have read it no less than five times. I often have the scene after finishing the novel in my mind, and I can't help but feel excited! This is a new fanfic I want to write based on my fantasy!
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Official(158)Scraped 18d ago
I have read Swallowing the Starry Sky twice. I think what fascinates me about Tomato is Luo Feng's clear-mindedness and determination to protect the world in his heart. He comes out from the earth to protect his family, his country, and the earth. Then the greater the ability, the greater the responsibility. Protecting mankind is about constantly overcoming difficulties, improving oneself, surpassing self-performance, defeating every upcoming disaster, and reaching every new height. However, Luo Feng now has no heroic plot at all, except that he is very strong and wants to become stronger. They are all scheming. I have the trump card of the Beast King and Lianyuan Technique in my hands. I feel a bit cheating and bullying the weak, as if people will be punished for their own sake. I don't yearn for this Luo Feng at all. It's not attractive to read, and I have no faith at all! ! !
Chapter 2: When he first went to another tribe and was warmly received by others, Luo Feng backhandedly enslaved them? ? Is this Luo Feng?
Important battles are not described? Are others so strong without any means or secrets? The description is too hasty and it overstates Luo Feng, and the chapter is too short.
Is it interesting to update one or two short and nonsense episodes a day?
In fact, He Tianxun is not a good person. He just wants to seize She and Luo Feng's body. When Luo Feng broke through the 100th floor and soaked the body, didn't he say that there was an impurity that was eliminated from the body by the golden film?
I hope I can write it again
I read the whole book chapter by chapter. It's not very well written, but it's very interesting. I suggest you re-write it based on this book. Make a lot of changes, such as the rhythm, improve one part, bury the golden sand fruit, absorb the gain/origin, the branch of the human race in the mainland and the prehistoric palace. Main Mao Dun/Tianjin Realm is written according to the Xueluo World/The Origin Continent should be very big, it shouldn't be a few small places. You can try to understand the local distribution when you first come here/Then there is the Origin World. I personally feel that the pace is too fast. There are only 36 cities in a short time and should be written in detail. The first-level cultivation time, from when I first came to meet the old world beast, to Jiuzhen City and Qiansi Luoshan's enmity, to Frost City, then to Wanjie City, to the primitive mountain realm, and then to the sword realm, Yuan Zai founded 36 cities, and they existed for so long. They practiced for so long at the same time, and the city masters practiced for so long. The last ones who reached the god level were all Five Source Supreme. Luo Feng broke through so quickly, and the rhythm after that became faster and faster, and it became shorter and shorter. Personally, I feel like there is water in the back. It should take a little longer to practice, after all, there is no golden finger, wait, Shuangwen is too unfavorable to cheat, it is boring, especially in the end, even if you understand the basic law of chaos, you should be considered world-level and stronger. There is already a Star Tower that can suppress world-level, but He Tianxun can still fight without mastering the source world. I personally feel that the source world is almost too unnatural compared to other time-travel golden finger novels. It is boring to live so long in the same period as the Yuan Dynasty, and to practice so long and so fast as Luo Feng. (I hope this can be rewritten to fill in the pitfalls, and the pace is slowed down a bit, like the world master and the law in the original work. In the Main Realm, if you stay longer, it will be like the Holy Realm. The writing was very good, but when it comes to the God King, the pace is a little faster, and it is a bit perfunctory. I am a fan of Swallowing Stars. This part is not very good, but it is still very interesting. I can rewrite the whole part. That would be better)😷😷
Much better than the previous sequel, thumbs up to the author👍
Update update update update come on come on update
This sequel is already very well written.
Your writing is very concise. I will always support you. It's a pity that I can't reward you, otherwise I would definitely reward you.
Don't force it, just do what you can. You are on the same level as tomatoes👍👍
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Official(158)Scraped 18d ago
I have read Swallowing the Starry Sky twice. I think what fascinates me about Tomato is Luo Feng's clear-mindedness and determination to protect the world in his heart. He comes out from the earth to protect his family, his country, and the earth. Then the greater the ability, the greater the responsibility. Protecting mankind is about constantly overcoming difficulties, improving oneself, surpassing self-performance, defeating every upcoming disaster, and reaching every new height. However, Luo Feng now has no heroic plot at all, except that he is very strong and wants to become stronger. They are all scheming. I have the trump card of the Beast King and Lianyuan Technique in my hands. I feel a bit cheating and bullying the weak, as if people will be punished for their own sake. I don't yearn for this Luo Feng at all. It's not attractive to read, and I have no faith at all! ! !
Chapter 2: When he first went to another tribe and was warmly received by others, Luo Feng backhandedly enslaved them? ? Is this Luo Feng?
Important battles are not described? Are others so strong without any means or secrets? The description is too hasty and it overstates Luo Feng, and the chapter is too short.
Is it interesting to update one or two short and nonsense episodes a day?
In fact, He Tianxun is not a good person. He just wants to seize She and Luo Feng's body. When Luo Feng broke through the 100th floor and soaked the body, didn't he say that there was an impurity that was eliminated from the body by the golden film?
I hope I can write it again
I read the whole book chapter by chapter. It's not very well written, but it's very interesting. I suggest you re-write it based on this book. Make a lot of changes, such as the rhythm, improve one part, bury the golden sand fruit, absorb the gain/origin, the branch of the human race in the mainland and the prehistoric palace. Main Mao Dun/Tianjin Realm is written according to the Xueluo World/The Origin Continent should be very big, it shouldn't be a few small places. You can try to understand the local distribution when you first come here/Then there is the Origin World. I personally feel that the pace is too fast. There are only 36 cities in a short time and should be written in detail. The first-level cultivation time, from when I first came to meet the old world beast, to Jiuzhen City and Qiansi Luoshan's enmity, to Frost City, then to Wanjie City, to the primitive mountain realm, and then to the sword realm, Yuan Zai founded 36 cities, and they existed for so long. They practiced for so long at the same time, and the city masters practiced for so long. The last ones who reached the god level were all Five Source Supreme. Luo Feng broke through so quickly, and the rhythm after that became faster and faster, and it became shorter and shorter. Personally, I feel like there is water in the back. It should take a little longer to practice, after all, there is no golden finger, wait, Shuangwen is too unfavorable to cheat, it is boring, especially in the end, even if you understand the basic law of chaos, you should be considered world-level and stronger. There is already a Star Tower that can suppress world-level, but He Tianxun can still fight without mastering the source world. I personally feel that the source world is almost too unnatural compared to other time-travel golden finger novels. It is boring to live so long in the same period as the Yuan Dynasty, and to practice so long and so fast as Luo Feng. (I hope this can be rewritten to fill in the pitfalls, and the pace is slowed down a bit, like the world master and the law in the original work. In the Main Realm, if you stay longer, it will be like the Holy Realm. The writing was very good, but when it comes to the God King, the pace is a little faster, and it is a bit perfunctory. I am a fan of Swallowing Stars. This part is not very good, but it is still very interesting. I can rewrite the whole part. That would be better)😷😷
Much better than the previous sequel, thumbs up to the author👍
Update update update update come on come on update
This sequel is already very well written.
Your writing is very concise. I will always support you. It's a pity that I can't reward you, otherwise I would definitely reward you.
Don't force it, just do what you can. You are on the same level as tomatoes👍👍
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