Ryan's Sword

More crazy works after The Amber Sword

It will be on the shelves today, (detailed review has been completed) Friends who have collected it should remember to subscribe! PS: Of course Qingyu will go, And you won't go there alone! Well, okay, enough gossip, Start writing a book review~ Content introduction: This is the story of a top Azure player who was cheated by the captain and ran away from the new area in anger. I originally thought it would be a scenario where the king comes, rises quickly, and kills everyone. However, this fact is not as simple as imagined. The protagonist comes to the Azure world (Azure beta version) several years ago. Although the main setting of this world is not much different from the Azure public beta version, the development of the major camps is not perfect. It is full of countless opportunities for growth, but also full of countless unknown dangers. Advantages: Although the author is a newcomer, he writes very carefully, and the transitions and details are quite appropriate. The particularity of the game writing is also well grasped, the style is very recognizable, and there is no problem of mixed styles at all. (Many editors pay more attention to this point because they are from the literature department, so this can be regarded as a relatively large point increase) Okay, let's omit five thousand words about the advantages and start talking about the disadvantages. Disadvantages: Although this article is very careful, there are still some mistakes that novices often make. 1. The foreshadowing in some places in the early stage was a little lacking. It was reasonable but it didn't look cool enough. It didn't give people a strong sense of soul impact. It improved in the later stage, but there is still a lot of room for improvement. 2. There is a certain amount of invalid information and data. It is true that game writing and competitive writing require rigorous data control awareness, just like the author of "Starting from Scratch" once published a single chapter to correct a data error. And rigorous data control can indeed leave a deep impression on people, and it is also a good tool for making cool points. But for newcomers, this is a bit too difficult. Although the data in the article is relatively accurate, it is used too few times. Sometimes people even think that the data is a bit redundant and cumbersome. 3. The setting of the plot is quite satisfactory, with a certain amount of excitement and highlights. However, the flow rate in the early stage is a bit slow, and the pace can be faster. Overall comment: There are still shortcomings, but there is hope for the future! By the way, here are the highlights: With a "pop" sound, a long sword made of fine iron, carrying a huge impact from a height, penetrated Ferola's plump chest, and nailed her to the ground from top to bottom. (Why did you choose this paragraph? Veteran drivers, please understand it through the context.)