Tokyo: Players Behind the Scenes

It can be said that it is for the sake of good writing, but looking at the behind-the-scenes flow, the behind-the-scenes articles that players read are for a sense of pleasure. They definitely focus on the dungeon and the changes it brings to each person. What they see is the change. To put it bluntly, it is to watch others showing off. Even if it is a light novel, Nissin cannot escape this, so a dungeon can have up to 20 to 30 pictures. For the first transition, more than 10 pictures are enough. Look at those writings. In the game dungeon, which chapter is particularly long, especially the initial chapter? Your later chapters may be better, writing sixty or seventy chapters for one copy, but your copy has little content. It is not the kind of copy that claims to be a small world. It is just a simple subway exploration. In addition, you have interspersed a lot of real-life elements, and you have sixty or seventy chapters at once, and it still looks a bit messy. I feel that we can try to eliminate some meaningless real-life links. Many real-life links feel that there is no fixed context, and it is a bit strange, and something suddenly appears. Since you are writing about these players, you must focus on looking at them from the perspective of these players. A few touches on the rest are enough. It's best to finish a copy before writing about the real world, otherwise it will be a bit messy.

No, buddy, the tempo of your copy of "Subway" is so slow. You make me believe that the tempo will become faster after you put it on the shelves. Is it possible? Advantages: Excellent character description, clear and unobtrusive details. The supporting characters are basically not stereotyped, and they are not forcefully described. The background and details of the characters can be explained clearly in just a few sentences. It can be said that his writing skills are quite profound. Disadvantages: The pace is extremely slow, and it is not a fun Internet article at all. You are an online novel about a behind-the-scenes mastermind, which is not comparable to Shuangwen. I can only say that I have it in this life😰 The above evaluation is only for the free chapters. I haven't read or commented on the paid chapters. At least the free content doesn't give me the desire to spend money to subscribe.

It's a mess, who the hell is the protagonist? And those two policemen have been out of the country too much. Why, you still want to write a detective novel? ? Are you going to break through the barrier? Can random thoughts grasp the key points?

I originally thought it was a behind-the-scenes stream, but I felt like it was a result of wasting an hour because of multiple protagonists. I don't like to remind other friends who have the same acquaintance, especially if I want to watch a normal behind-the-scenes stream.

Let's talk about the shortcomings first. In the second dungeon "Subway" in the early stage, the plot is divided into three main lines, namely the player's game process and his own story, the protagonist's daily life, and the police investigation process. One branch line is a foreshadowing for the subsequent dungeons. The author tried to describe the gradual interweaving of the three main lines, but in fact the description failed. The final real-life impact was actually well written, but it was not worth so many previous plots. Moreover, because the description of the game process was broken and other plots were often inserted, the entire game was messy and incomprehensible. There were too many branch plots that needed to be memorized. The daily life of the protagonist was actually OK, but it should not have been inserted so much that the plot became more bloated. The police line with appropriate weight was the best written. After talking about the shortcomings, it's time to praise. After the subway copy, the author finally picked up the speed and the plot started to become exciting. The most eye-catching parts of the first volume are when Nobi went to the subway to save people and Nobi started wandering. The influence of the Orochi copy was actually written in a hurry. The Demon Sword copy was quite satisfactory. The final story of Doman was quite well written. Although the final scene of Mount Fuji was not skillfully written, it was still OK. The first story in the second volume is too complicated, which makes the game unsightly, but the subsequent real-life effects are well written. The subsequent real-life London stories are the best, and the author's big scenes are getting better and better. Jack's story is also very good, and so is Jun Shiyi's later ones. Overall, the advantages of this article include: 1. Excellent description of realistic influences. The author is very good at describing disaster scenes and various side effects brought about by extraordinary things. 2. Excellent plot arrangement except for the subway. The game only starts after a period of time. When the game starts, reality starts to happen. The setting is very good. As long as you look at the story lines randomly arranged by the mastermind behind the scenes, you will know how wonderful the author's step-by-step approach is. 3. Excellent descriptions of some characters. Most characters are not annoying, which is rare. Even if some characters kill people like crazy, you will feel that they actually have difficulties. Some characters are very holy, but you feel that they are saints. Possible hidden dangers: The subsequent positioning of the protagonist. Nowadays, the positioning of the protagonist is more and more inclined to be a cover-up, and it is a bit like a village rat. This is not good, but it would be even worse if the protagonist really comes into contact with the players. I don't know how the author will deal with it. In addition, there are two characters, the girlfriend and the younger brother. In fact, the author wrote it very well. I quite like their two characters, but now with the reduction of the protagonist and their plot, they feel a bit dispensable. But if the author really describes them in a big way, it will make people feel watery, unless they come into contact with the extraordinary. But the girlfriend and the younger brother come into contact with the extraordinary, and it feels inappropriate, which is very contradictory... I like the author to continue writing. In fact, except for the mistakes in the early subway, this book is the best one I have ever read, and it is also the most special one. What I am talking about is the existence of extraordinary people. There are too many behind-the-scenes stories where extraordinary people appear too easily. On the contrary, I think the author's writing is very good. A bunch of extraordinary people prevent disasters, which is actually very romantic. If the current rhythm remains unchanged, the author's book really makes people want to keep reading.

... I don't understand why I have to write so much reality. I started writing about the heroine in a rush (and the description is ordinary) before I even wrote any effective plot.

The proportion of daily life is greater than that of the copy, and it seems to be intermittent. As a result, the copy and daily life are not continuous. It is difficult to have the desire to read more, and it does not have the characteristics of behind-the-scenes flow. It is not satisfying. I suggest changing the title of the book, but since it is a book shortage, you can't ask for too much. At least the author still has a certain skill in character creation.

The protagonist of the invisible stream, the behind-the-scenes writing becomes less and less exciting as the story progresses. The protagonist is the same as a personal computer, and it is even more disgusting to write about the ** manor. What is the difference between the protagonist and being dead? Dozens of pictures have no protagonist. The legitimate players who signed up for the group were treated like dogs and treated like trash, while the villain players were treated better than the others. As for the protagonist, does he pursue power? What do you want to do when you get the power? Does he control the direction of the world? Did he ever doubt that his system wanted to control the power on his own? Not even the pretentious behind-the-scenes stuff... The game relies entirely on his ** system to advance, and the protagonist is of no use at all. The part I watched didn't even include the protagonist's favorite campus love routine. Author, you like to write about that ** player so much, where is the protagonist? Have you become a fool who wipes your butt?

After Chapter 200, there are less and less protagonists. They are always described by other people. Most of the other people are Japanese and have no sense of empathy at all. I don't know what to read.

No matter what others say, I just really enjoyed reading this book