Mortal: Since 500 Years Ago
About This Novel
Chu Wuji traveled through the mortal world and came five hundred years earlier than Han Li. He knew the plot well and planned in advance, but never relied on the plot, because from the moment he appeared, everything changed. More than five hundred years later, Han Li first entered Yellow Maple Valley, and Chu Wuji was already famous in Yue Kingdom; In the Xutian Palace, Han Li was still struggling to survive in a dangerous situation, but Chu Wuji had already taken the opportunity; From the Chaos Star Sea to Tiannan, from the human world to the spiritual world, the further Han Li walked, the more he discovered that that person was already walking in front of him. Many years later, Han Li became the Taoist Patriarch. Looking back on this life, I find that there is always a lingering shadow above my head. That was Chu Wuji.
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Official(35)Scraped 26d ago
Although the royalties are not high, I am not happy that an unscrupulous capitalist has taken away one of my own points. The platform charges a membership fee and gives away free coins. But by subscribing with free coins, the author does not get any income. Is this reasonable? I won't say anything unnecessary, otherwise brothers won't see this message. Aim at the platform!
This is the poorest early fanfic protagonist I have ever seen.
Fake alchemy cultivation, weak fighting skills, and a little bit of alchemy in Baiyi. It feels good in the early stage, but it doesn't feel good at all. After forming the elixir, go to Tiannan to get magic weapons, body refining, bugs, pets, and spiritual consciousness. You can arrange auction houses, authentic or fake maps, and secret realms like the Bloody Forbidden Land. There are many things I forgot to say and I haven't written them down. Anyway, you can just look at the arrangements.
The early writing was pretty good, Xutian Palace started catching spiritual ginseng and poisoning it! The spiritual ginseng was just handed over to others! The protagonist no longer has to conceive a baby! Take this magical medicine to gamble on human nature with your own life! Extremely poisonous! What a waste of my money!
The matter of going to Tiannan to learn a language, two chapters of water
Find that kind of damn person, search his soul, and write a sentence like this. You have to learn it by yourself, and then you end up with two chapters like this🤗🤗
You can be very creative. You can go to Tiannan to get the Tian Bottle and use it for hundreds of years. There is also the Tianyuan Pagoda.
Overall, I would rate it as an excellent work. It doesn't follow others' lead and writes its own original plot. The language and text are a bit clichéd, but it's not bad at all. It's better than those who write anecdotes, don't convey the meaning of their words, and make bad jokes. One of the shortcomings I feel is that Gold Finger is not good enough. If you want to give people a sense of immersion and satisfaction in fan fiction, Gold Finger cannot be too weak. Otherwise, you will not be as good as the original Han Li, or not much different from him, and it will be very unpleasant to read. It means that you have a crushing advantage over Han Li. The other is the magical weapons, magical powers, skills, fighting skills, and the cultivation process. These can be written carefully. A big highlight of the original work of Mortal is the wonderful fighting skills. There are many magical weapons and magical powers. The training process is mysterious and mysterious, and it gives a refreshing feeling of upgrading. Another person, you just had one fight and didn't get two moves, but your magic power can't keep up. You have always said that your magic power is deeper than that of the same level, but after all the companions fought, I haven't seen anyone with weak kidneys like you. Since your magic power is deeper than others, you must show it. In a fight of the same intensity, others are weak and you are still tough. This shows how powerful your skills are. Subsequent important opportunities such as the Gold-eating Insect, the Golden Thunder Bamboo, the Xuantian Xuantian Immortal Vine, the Golden Que Jade Book, etc. Need to be dealt with. I think it is inappropriate for some fan fiction to give these to Han Li. These are great opportunities in the spiritual world and even unique and irreplaceable opportunities. You can just grab the other unimportant ones. It is simply incomprehensible to give these away, unless you write a better opportunity than this, and you will not look down on these. My personal suggestion is that the more you write, the better.
It looks good, but the pace feels too slow. More to come.
The writing is good, but the plot is a bit watery, and the plot rhythm is about the same as ten years ago. Wherever the protagonist goes, something happens, troubles continue, and it's tiring to watch.
The heroine feels like she could be Ling Yuling, Yuan Yao or Bingfeng
Doesn't the author read everyone's comments? After arriving in Tiannan, my level plummeted, and the writing was too poor. How could everything be your business and then you still like to meddle in other people's business? This kind of thing happens every day in the world of immortality. As long as you encounter it, you just care about it, right? There is also the part about Yunlu, the old devil, where you meddle in some mortal affairs and then have sex with the old devil. I was extremely speechless during this part. Even if the woman dies, it won't affect you at all, right?
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Official(35)Scraped 26d ago
Although the royalties are not high, I am not happy that an unscrupulous capitalist has taken away one of my own points. The platform charges a membership fee and gives away free coins. But by subscribing with free coins, the author does not get any income. Is this reasonable? I won't say anything unnecessary, otherwise brothers won't see this message. Aim at the platform!
This is the poorest early fanfic protagonist I have ever seen.
Fake alchemy cultivation, weak fighting skills, and a little bit of alchemy in Baiyi. It feels good in the early stage, but it doesn't feel good at all. After forming the elixir, go to Tiannan to get magic weapons, body refining, bugs, pets, and spiritual consciousness. You can arrange auction houses, authentic or fake maps, and secret realms like the Bloody Forbidden Land. There are many things I forgot to say and I haven't written them down. Anyway, you can just look at the arrangements.
The early writing was pretty good, Xutian Palace started catching spiritual ginseng and poisoning it! The spiritual ginseng was just handed over to others! The protagonist no longer has to conceive a baby! Take this magical medicine to gamble on human nature with your own life! Extremely poisonous! What a waste of my money!
The matter of going to Tiannan to learn a language, two chapters of water
Find that kind of damn person, search his soul, and write a sentence like this. You have to learn it by yourself, and then you end up with two chapters like this🤗🤗
You can be very creative. You can go to Tiannan to get the Tian Bottle and use it for hundreds of years. There is also the Tianyuan Pagoda.
Overall, I would rate it as an excellent work. It doesn't follow others' lead and writes its own original plot. The language and text are a bit clichéd, but it's not bad at all. It's better than those who write anecdotes, don't convey the meaning of their words, and make bad jokes. One of the shortcomings I feel is that Gold Finger is not good enough. If you want to give people a sense of immersion and satisfaction in fan fiction, Gold Finger cannot be too weak. Otherwise, you will not be as good as the original Han Li, or not much different from him, and it will be very unpleasant to read. It means that you have a crushing advantage over Han Li. The other is the magical weapons, magical powers, skills, fighting skills, and the cultivation process. These can be written carefully. A big highlight of the original work of Mortal is the wonderful fighting skills. There are many magical weapons and magical powers. The training process is mysterious and mysterious, and it gives a refreshing feeling of upgrading. Another person, you just had one fight and didn't get two moves, but your magic power can't keep up. You have always said that your magic power is deeper than that of the same level, but after all the companions fought, I haven't seen anyone with weak kidneys like you. Since your magic power is deeper than others, you must show it. In a fight of the same intensity, others are weak and you are still tough. This shows how powerful your skills are. Subsequent important opportunities such as the Gold-eating Insect, the Golden Thunder Bamboo, the Xuantian Xuantian Immortal Vine, the Golden Que Jade Book, etc. Need to be dealt with. I think it is inappropriate for some fan fiction to give these to Han Li. These are great opportunities in the spiritual world and even unique and irreplaceable opportunities. You can just grab the other unimportant ones. It is simply incomprehensible to give these away, unless you write a better opportunity than this, and you will not look down on these. My personal suggestion is that the more you write, the better.
It looks good, but the pace feels too slow. More to come.
The writing is good, but the plot is a bit watery, and the plot rhythm is about the same as ten years ago. Wherever the protagonist goes, something happens, troubles continue, and it's tiring to watch.
The heroine feels like she could be Ling Yuling, Yuan Yao or Bingfeng
Doesn't the author read everyone's comments? After arriving in Tiannan, my level plummeted, and the writing was too poor. How could everything be your business and then you still like to meddle in other people's business? This kind of thing happens every day in the world of immortality. As long as you encounter it, you just care about it, right? There is also the part about Yunlu, the old devil, where you meddle in some mortal affairs and then have sex with the old devil. I was extremely speechless during this part. Even if the woman dies, it won't affect you at all, right?
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