From the Beginning of the Wilderness Period, the Liver Emerged as the Sage of Heaven

It's hard to break down after reading the first chapter. Your proficiency panel experience: [Rock Marksmanship 47/50 (-1)] This -1 is really hard to understand. It also explains that if you don't have a permanent certificate, if you make a mistake, your experience will be reduced by one. No, I am very confused. It doesn't matter if you don't have a permanent certificate. It may mean that the realm drops when you are seriously injured, such as from an immortal to a soul, but it is difficult to lose one. If you are wrong, why does the proficiency increase at the beginning? Does it also increase if you are wrong? Is the proficiency panel so low? Your experience has increased, but you still can't decide what's right or wrong? Then what's the use of this proficiency?

But it is different from the common experience panel. It does not have the ability to be certified forever. It will experience regression! [Rock Marksmanship 47/50 (-1)] The Panshi marksmanship in Ji Zheng's hand suddenly stopped, and he picked up the brush on the table next to him and wrote down the mistakes and omissions in the marksmanship just now. "The experience panel does not have the ability to prove it forever, so if I am wrong, I am wrong." "But if I find out what is wrong and correct it, I will be right."

It is extremely difficult for a Celestial Immortal to defeat 10 Loose Immortals. Their realms are not suppressed. No matter what realm they are, as long as there are 10 formations of a lower realm, they can fight with those of a higher realm, and maybe even kill them. Then this high realm is of use. 100 Immortals can compete with the gods, and 10 gods can compete with the Taoist ancestors. This is really boring, and the protagonist and Ji Ning live in that princess's house. Ji's only immortal-level formation can stop several immortals from Shaoyan's? Couldn't he use the protagonist and Ji Ning's parents to threaten them to commit suicide? Are the villains so brainless?

The first page I clicked on made me laugh. "The protagonist is thoughtful while thinking." Is this something that humans can write?

To be honest, once I saw that proficiency, I lost the desire to watch anymore.

With this way of writing, it will be gone soon.

In fact, the rest is okay, except that you wiped out all the opportunities and disasters of Ji Ning's early days. I jumped to the ending and watched it. It's outrageous that he can become the ultimate supreme. To be honest, there are no opportunities and disasters in the Three Realms Chapter. After all, the protagonist is still there, so it won't be bad. But without those disasters, it would be difficult for Ji Ning to become a god in the world. And for Ji Ning, the disasters and various coincidences in the Three Realms Chapter cannot be copied. Without it, the basic plan of the ultimate way is gone. The writing style of your fan is too streamlined. Let the protagonist accept Ji Ning's opportunity and erase Ji Ning's disaster, with a mix of confusion. In this case, Ji Ning probably won't be able to become the Taoist Lord of Life and Death. It's a bit outrageous for you to be able to realize the ultimate way. In fact, let's not say whether it is outrageous or not. It's so rigid and rigid that the original drama is substituted. It's really not as good as the original work. After all, it's too blunt.

Strong Opportunity I'm very unhappy. I feel like the writing is a bit messy. Magical revision.

It's okay, but the ending is a little rushed! It would be nice if it wasn't the Great Moyu, it's too close. Entering the Great Mo Realm is cultivation, there is no other development!

Take a look and go in slowly. It will be better if my writing becomes stronger in the future.