Hong Kong Variety Show: I Want to Live Forever

It's too verbose, and there is too much content in my heart, which is as watery as the Pacific Ocean. If it wasn't so watery, there would definitely be a lot of people watching it. If it was too watery, I wouldn't want to watch it.

First, there are too many inner dramas, and the words about inner activities + the introduction of various situations have advanced from the introductory level to the verbose level. . Second, make connections at every turn. When you go to a party to meet a few friends, you don't talk about friends, but talk about making connections; when you introduce a few friends to friends, you don't talk about friends, but talk about introducing a few connections. It's so funny, just imagine that when you change the word "people connections" into your normal conversation, you get goosebumps. . Third, the protagonist and the woman, the protagonist passively starts the group and then passively ends it? What are you writing about? Do you let the readers take on the role of the protagonist and experience being given what they want? The correct approach should be: she decides what to start, and when to end, the protagonist has the final say! This is how the protagonist should behave!

There are too many inner dramas in the front, which are all nonsense. I feel that there is not much follow-up on the plot. There are inner dramas and a lot of skill introductions. It's enough to know some things. Don't always introduce the plot without advancing it. It feels like I'm just afraid that readers won't know. It's all about introducing the protagonist. After watching it for a long time, it was all inner monologue.

You can tell at first glance that he is a street kid, and he can't keep it up even if he updates it every day.

Hong Kong TV series Hong Kong TV series, since you write Hong Kong TV series, why do you have no sense of participation at all? There is no storyline. It is always about upgrading skills. The assembly work looks bland and boring. I hope the author can participate more in the storyline of Hong Kong movies.

After reading more than ten chapters, I can't stand it anymore. After reading chapter 13, the CCP was confused by the concept of chapter 11😐

Various tests to push the bulls, five of the 50 chapters are useful, the rest are just water, blacklisted, the author is seriously self-indulgent

The intention is very high, immortality, you, a person who wants to be immortal, compete with mortals in a battle of wits and courage, and your price will drop! One strength can defeat ten levels. Absolute power is absolute right. At that time, it will not be up to you to decide whether it is black or white. You only need to focus on improving your strength. Interpersonal communication is only suitable for outstanding mortals. You are a cheating person. You have already cheated, and you still keep yourself low and do something small. What's the point of cheating?

The author wants to express everything and put everything in it, which makes the readers tired.

It's too watery. Half of the thousands of words in one chapter are watery. It's all narration and psychological description. The key thing is said twice. Author, your writing style is bound to be a hit. The subject matter and characters are okay, but the word count is destined to be a hit.