Secret: I Loaded the Immortal Cultivation Simulator

You can see in this book almost all the common mistakes made by new authors, and you can also see the various attempts made by moderately thoughtful authors to make up for their mistakes. After reading it, you must feel the same as me. The author worked very hard and sincerely to try to create something different. To this end, he honestly used various assembly line formulas and writing routines at the beginning, and he went smoothly. It can be said that it started well. But the problem is that the author's strength does not match his ambition, and his own outline is not well prepared. The result is... I piled up a lot of lines and found that I couldn't push them anymore. My combat power collapsed but my rhythm was still too slow. If you can't solve this problem, you can just turn over the table and give out your original settings without any foreshadowing, and then start over again in the second half and continue writing based on this setting. The article appears to be like a concave character - the stomach is directly punched into the butt, the front and back are almost not the same thing, and the feeling of separation is severe. The reason why he is evaluated as an example of wrong questions is because his mistakes are often made by novice authors, and they appear in endlessly and are interlocking, such as: 1. Licking Melissa out of nowhere (of course he didn't write the licking process in a sadistic or neurotic way, on the contrary, it went smoothly, which reduced the toxicity); 2. Mingming quickly licked the incident of the evil god's descendant and died on the surface. This long-prepared Chekhov's Gun was instantly lowered, and Melissa was not mentioned at all; 3. Rigidly follow the rhythm of the original work. For example, there is obviously a line of Melissa, but the relationship has to be severed after fake death like in the original work, and there is no reason for fear of being implicated like Xiao Ke in the original work; 4. The combat power collapsed. I didn't think clearly about the setting of the golden finger at all. I thought it would come out one after another, and it would be strong and weak; 5. There are too many lines about grass gray snakes and it takes a long time to get to the theme. People who read a lot of this kind of literature will know what the author probably wants to write, such as integrating the system of cultivating immortals into a weird world view. He has also been working hard, such as using the golden elixir to overcome tribulations and other things to correspond to the various levels of mystery. However, the key points of skills, spiritual energy, etc. Have never been revealed, so it seems that there is no point in showing it again after the combat power cannot be suppressed; 6. Turn over the table to mechanically induce gods. The sudden appearance of an inexplicable person awakens the protagonist's inexplicable memory and gives him an inexplicable purpose; 7. Overthrow yourself. Obviously the unique setting is his selling point - the protagonist does not know the original plot and sincerely supports the Fool, the protagonist generously digs Xiaoke's cabbage, and the protagonist will not be polluted if he is cheating. As a result, after the deus ex machina appeared, he overturned it. Not only did he remember the plot, but he also told Xiao Ke that you were a character in the book; 8. The purpose is unclear, starting with cultivating immortality, then turning to revolution? 9. Lack of daily life... The depiction of the ecology and sentient beings of this world is superficial; 10. It's a mess, there were so many fights in the front, but finally all the problems were solved through negotiation? 11, 12, 13... I'm tired, I think these are enough. With the author's efforts to save it, the standard of this book returned from being thrown out of the street to the point of "still readable". The author struggled to finish the book and gave it a decent ending. From the overall writing and characterization, this book is a pity. All the problems are different from most of the authors of street articles who have evil intentions or are sneaky. They are purely caused by the author's inexperience and lack of outline, and can be forgiven. Although there are many problems from beginning to end, the stumbling steps still keep a lower limit. The story has been told, and there is some innovation. All I can say is, keep up the good work! Suggestion, just take a look

The protagonist's golden finger is too confusing. He thinks of it one by one, and there is no clear way to become stronger. This causes the protagonist to become a reckless man + a licking dog. The secret world improvement is, acting + magic potions, cultivating immortals. According to my understanding, it should be refining spiritual energy, breaking through the spiritual energy training, and building foundation pills. The book does not solve the problem of incompatibility very well. Instead, it touches a little bit of both, which is very confusing.

Aren't all the time travelers from the past?

The system is different, and the combat effectiveness will easily collapse in the later stage.

After taking a quick look at it, I thought it was very good. The essence of the early plot, the golden finger is very strong

Where's Melissa? I want to see the crematorium

Please support me. Is it a single heroine or multiple heroines? Does the protagonist not know the plot?

Why is no one reading it? Looking at the introduction, I think the writing is okay.

Four stars for encouragement, but the author's writing style needs to be improved.

God of War, which took more than a month to complete.