I'm in a Love Apartment, and the System Asks Me to Cultivate Immortality

He was trying to cultivate immortality by selling sheep's head and selling dog meat, but it turned out that he had cultivated but didn't seem to have cultivated at all. During the Qi refining period, he couldn't withstand Hu Yifei's casual slap. At the fifth level of Qi refining, his body felt a little better. But in fact, it was useless. According to what you wrote, Lin Wanyu's bodyguard must be in the realm of an immortal? Anyway, the function of the system is to improve the number of words. For example, Tanghulu is written as Barrier-Breaking Pill. Then the protagonist starts all kinds of nonsense in order to get this so-called Barrier-Breaking Pill from Lin Wanyu, and then the number of words can be improved by one chapter. Finally, he gets it. After eating it, the system shows a realm breakthrough, and then there is no reaction and he vomits.

This ending is too hasty. The endings of several girlfriends are not explained clearly. The writing becomes more and more confusing later on.

It turns out that the last book with the heroine Wanyu was also written by you, and the writing style of this one has obviously improved a lot. But the biggest problem with this kind of sweet novel is that the plot is too bland and requires a lot of writing power to sweeten the readers. Or it has to have some main plot, which has a small goal and doesn't need to be too intense, but it still has a sense of the direction of the plot. Like Conan and Pokémon, those with weak main plots have to have some main plot, otherwise it will still be boring after a long time. I would like to give some advice to the author. There is quite a conflict between harem and sex. It is very easy for a harem novel to collapse the character and create an image of the heroine that cannot be established. I suggest you not to write too many stories. Two or three will be the end. Your narrative rhythm is obviously not a purely enjoyable novel, and it will not attract the readers of purely enjoyable harem novels. There are very few iPartment fans who read it. No matter how much you criticize it, even if you finish writing it, I'm afraid few of them will be able to stick to it. It's rare to see a fan of iPartment who doesn't moan nonsense and has good writing skills. I still hope you can write well.

It felt so tedious. I read dozens of chapters and still couldn't finish the day. I wrote about every little thing, like buying a mobile phone and changing my phone number, and buying daily necessities. I didn't even watch the protagonist take the pills he got. Shouldn't a normal person find a private space to take the medicine as soon as possible after getting these things?

There are too many women. . . . . . . [Emot=default,02/]How to edit in today's society? If it were directly brought to society, no one would say anything.

The author is suitable for writing a single female protagonist. For multiple female protagonists, your stomach aches when you write this. It is a 🍅 level. Various accidents prevent you from going any further, and the female protagonist shrinks in various ways.

May I ask which TV series Su Weiwei is in? ? ? ? ?

Is the protagonist acting like an idiot this time? Can you touch your feet?

Apartment: The system started out with watts. The author doesn't want to scream. It's basically the same!

Isn't this the end of the world? Really good 6