Steel Steam and Flames

In garbage chapter 11, the protagonist is taken care of by a scheming green tea bitch. The male protagonist is so stubborn that he looks like a woman.

At the beginning, I met the eldest lady and had her fate changed. Then the protagonist is cowardly and the article abuses the protagonist. As for the steam-era sniper rifle that hits the target poison point three to five kilometers away, I won't complain. The protagonist's life has been decided by others several times. The plot is terrible, and every time I say two sentences, it takes two pages to make an analogy. (This is really unacceptable, please pay attention to it). The layout of each paragraph is not very good either. It seems to be more like a holy mother. I don't know much about the harem, but there have been five or six beautiful women (noble-born, capable, etc.) Since the beginning.

I just read the first ten chapters when I saw the book recommendation. I can only say that I have worked diligently to write millions of words, and there is a reason why it is still not popular. The Three Golden Chapters are not a truth, but there must be some truth to such a statement. There is no direct motivation for the protagonist at the beginning. There is only background description but no direct conflicts at the story level. This makes the readers not happy and also lacks the identity of the protagonist in the early stage. On this basis, the first dramatic conflict in the book includes the carriage scene with the Virgin and the child That's not to say that Our Lady can't write, but the story information at the beginning only gives elements such as poverty, future, and relatives. Making a future for your family is the only story driver at the moment. The early character creation is already very thin, and then the first conflict directly makes the protagonist lose the current core interests without being forced Of course, as a reader outside the book, everyone can see that it is for the role of Nuoer, but the logic of the protagonist's behavior is very abnormal. It can only be said that the plot arrangement is not appropriate enough. The large number of scene descriptions makes it difficult to grasp the key points. As the saying goes, the gun that appears in the first act must go off in the third act. The description in online novels must have its purpose in addition to the number of water words that the author and readers are well aware of. Such as enhancing the sense of atmosphere at the climax of the story, necessary foreshadowing, etc. Descriptions that are not divided into priorities will not only mess up the rhythm, but also cause readers' expectations to be misaligned. A detailed description of the scene will obviously be the focus of the current chapter or page, but if it does not play any role in the story. It will violate the readers' expectations for the story and be self-defeating. As for the contradictions in the settings, to be honest, I can find ways to fix them later. On the contrary, it is not a big problem. The delivery of guns to the door is too deliberate and so on. It is a small problem. I will definitely continue to read it, but I can only say that it has advantages, but the disadvantages are too obvious at the level of the web text.

The energy source of the locomotive is directly steam, so the logic is wrong. You might as well compress the air into a vapor compression storage tank. Even if you want to set up your own world, you can't violate the underlying logic.

Can anyone tell me what this book is about and what the main character does? I'm considering whether to continue reading...

The more I read the following chapters, the more disgusting I feel. Not interested at all,

I don't know what kind of mess this book is. It's been dozens of chapters and I still haven't written down what I'm going to write about. I don't even know what I'm writing about in the chapter on the carriage.

I don't know what I'm talking about, and there's nothing special about the protagonist.

I've read more than 300 chapters and can't stand it anymore. It's like a running account. I don't know what it's about.

To keep a promise to a strange woman, he tricked them twice! The most annoying thing is that I am the protagonist, no matter how rogue I am! It would be better if one of the two sisters dies! Lee died too early 😤, if you replace the horror with Lee, it will look more comfortable!