Cloud Train

The writing is very good, good reviews. Dark fantasy, rare. Original world, good reviews. Somewhat Japanese light novel style. The overall writing style is similar to that of a saint, It seems to be a structure of traveling + exploring the world. The author is advised to look at the writing style of the saintly author. Generally, this kind of writing will attract a small number of loyal readers. Most of the author's problems are with writing techniques rather than story design. Here are examples: At the beginning, a lot of characters suddenly appear and I can't remember their names. This resulted in some confusion in the first ten or so chapters. Usually I will remember the character's personality and his performance. But the author seems too anxious to lay out the world view. Maybe a female author, There are many parts that are not in line with the male author's habits. Maybe it has something to do with my reading habits. Some places that should be described with emphasis are instead brushed over. For example, around Chapter 15, the woman selling air freshener, Generally, authors will focus on portraying the sadness of women. This creates an empathetic effect on the reader. The protagonist will make choices that are not in line with his own character or human nature. Then it turns around in the subsequent plot, proving that the protagonist did the right thing. It's a more sadistic plot. Generally, this kind of paragraph will last at least two to three chapters, and the author wrote about half a chapter. This is a writing skill, but the author briefly mentions the key points. I guess it's because I don't want to make readers too sad. Then the results were quickly revealed, It's not really sad, but it's not satisfying either, and it's a bit dull. There are several plots similar to this, but there is too little foreshadowing and description. The flip occurs too quickly. Too much ink has been spent elsewhere. The above routine was used by Silver Fox, and it sparked widespread discussion at the time. Because this kind of routine must at least be broken out of context and let readers guess.

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The writing is good. But there is an obvious flaw in the opening scene... When choosing a name for a fantasy world, apart from the protagonist's name, there should be as few transliterations as possible, otherwise I won't be able to remember anything at a glance. It's like the City of Roses and the City of Green Vines. It's both vivid and nice-sounding, but it's given a ridiculous name that increases the pressure on readers. It's a thankless task. I've been thinking about it for a long time, so why bother?

It is an extremely niche traditional Western fantasy literature, but its level and ability are beyond doubt. Those who like it will enjoy it, while those who don't will abandon the book hastily. Uriel takes a strange last train and arrives in another world (Chapter 1 or 2) He discovered that the original location of his cabin had become a tavern, and then he realized that he had really traveled through time (Chapter 3-4) Unable to go back, he could only consider working in a tavern, and got to know Miss Carrot and the tavern owner Mr. Eds (up to Chapter 10). During this period, there were a lot of troubles, and there were various sub-scenes of other aristocratic forces and mysterious forces that he was not in the mood to watch. Then he and Miss Carrot fell in love, but Miss Carrot died unexpectedly in a city-wide undead incident. For this reason, Uriel, a cowardly apprentice, finally summoned up the courage to become a "mysterious" creature and wanted to avenge Miss Carrot. It's already twenty chapters here, and it's already worth watching. Fortunately, the subsequent plot is also twists and turns, and the stories and battles are also very exciting. It is a traditional Western fantasy story, magic, magic, and various races: druids, light elemental elves, dwarves, knights and necromancers, etc. 1. Overall writing style: Apart from the famous masters, this is the purest traditional Western fantasy writing style I have ever seen. To a certain extent, it has gotten rid of the tone and tone of Easterners writing Western fantasy. And between the lines, there is a rare piety and tenderness towards words. The writing style is quite amazing, but it's not the way to write a web article. Amplify a story into every detail, and through writing and imagination, together transform the words into a visual, auditory, and tactile feast that can be felt by all the senses except the melody. This is the controversial part of the book, with mixed reviews. Excessive description and pavement will turn it into a complicated decoration, and the description of certain details will make people addicted. To put it bluntly, the author writes with imagination. Writing can't save the world, imagination can. But imagination needs to be controlled by yourself. She introduced the scenes, dialogues and inner activities of all the characters that she believed in in her mind, in detail. Sometimes these details make the entire tense plot seem draggy. None of the books I have read so far are like it, striving for coherence and naturalness to the point where it almost becomes an obsession. There are also many shortcomings, such as the writing is obscure, the amount of information is large, and there are obstacles in reading. It is basically impossible to read it easily and happily. The author thought he was describing and supplementing the details, so he tried his best to restrain his restlessness in thinking about the tense plot, and patiently wrote out the long development. He really fell asleep after reading it over and over again. Even if you are a fan of Western fantasy novels, only a few of them will continue to read it. However, even so, this is still an excellent work. In terms of writing, it adheres to the babble of traditional Western fantasy. Even if there is only one protagonist, he can talk to himself and add rich psychological activities, environmental descriptions and simple memories into one chapter. Not to mention that when communicating with the characters, almost a greeting is followed by several lines of inner activities. I have to say, this is very traditional Western fantasy. Detailed nouns and a large number of modifiers jointly create a grand picture.