Invincible Tens of Billions of Years Ago

I guess I will go to work tomorrow. I went to two hospitals and had three tubes of blood drawn. It hurts a lot. Until now, my left and right hands are all aching, haha, but there is nothing I can do. I have to go to the company for a physical examination first, haha. I won't be sure about updates in the future! Why! ! ! Ahhhhh When I came back, I kept scrolling on Douyin and was obsessed with the marriage video.

I saw the author running to promote every day, No wonder it's not easy to give a good review and make a little game Use the keyboard to type, h s. Let me see what you typed. I'll go first.

Anyone gave me the same thing, and they were all pulled by the author from the comment section of other books. Anyone gave me the same thing, and they were all pulled by the author from the comment section of other books.

The number of words in the author's comments won't be more than the number of words in the creation, right?

Advantages -1- The language expression and sentence fragmentation are relatively fluent and appropriate. There are not many problems with basic writing skills. -2- Although the psychological description is too much and even a bit verbose, the psychological thinking and transformation of each character is grasped relatively accurately. -3- The description of the explosion of Shuangdian is okay, and the key frames of Shuangdian are recognized more accurately. Improvement -1- Maybe the excessive psychological description can be expressed directly through action description, so as to avoid the verbosity of the character's inner drama. -2- Advancing the plot should be like a roller coaster, with periods of speed and slowness. But the delivery setting should be like squeezing out toothpaste, squeeze a little and use a little. The slowness of this game is not well controlled. At the beginning of the book, the part that should be moving forward quickly is mistakenly used to advance slowly. This will make the audience extremely anxious, because this part is just a transition and will not be very attractive in itself, so the readers are eager to move forward quickly. When setting up the game, this game throws a bunch of settings at the audience. Many settings that will not be used until a long time later are written in just a few chapters. This will leave the audience at a loss and not leave much of an impression. The timing of speed and slowness in advancing the plot can be understood by imagining a roller coaster. There are two fun aspects to a roller coaster, one is the novelty of enjoying the scenery, and the other is the thrill of sprinting. Appreciating the scenery requires slowness, and if you are too slow, you will not be able to appreciate the scenery; sprinting requires speed, but if you are slow, you will not be able to experience the pleasure. In novels, plots that are not very attractive are generally advanced quickly, while plots that are either interesting or lyrical are slowed down to give the audience time to appreciate. The delivery settings should be squeezed out at the same time as they are used. If you are not using them, don't squeeze them out for the time being. Otherwise, the extra settings will become dry, and even the originally compact plot will become loose. If you have played the games "The Legend of Zelda: Breath of the Wild" and "Assassin's Creed", you will find that the former displays markers on the map bit by bit, while the latter releases all markers on the map at once. In the former, each mark is obtained by the player's personal exploration, which not only gives a sense of immersion, but is not dazzling, and makes the player remember it clearly and deeply; in the latter, players feel that these marks have nothing to do with their own experience, and are forced on them by the work. This not only loses the sense of immersion, but also makes people wonder which one to choose. So no matter how grand the entire novel world you want to write is, don't mention it in the early stages. Only realistic descriptions can impress readers. However, the sentence "The vast China, where all races coexist" will appear false and empty, because a work can only cover dozens of races at most, but the gap between ten thousand races and dozens of races is too big. This is just one example mentioned here, but in fact there are many other descriptions that share the same principle, which is to pursue realistic descriptions and avoid false and empty descriptions. -3- The storyboards of this work are all written because of the protagonist. It can be said that "when the protagonist moves, the whole world will be shocked", but this is written by Jackie Chan. And I feel that even if it is an invincible novel, it should not be written about Jackie Chan Aotian. The difference is that Wudi's novel only has the protagonist whose strength has reached the ceiling, but not every event has to be centered on the protagonist. Even in a plot situation where the protagonist is revealed as a saint, at most the people present will only temporarily revolve around the protagonist; while in Long Aotian, the whole world revolves around the protagonist almost all the time, which is equivalent to the baby's thinking of "I am the eternal center of the world", but such a giant baby is really embarrassing for readers. Summary It is recommended that the author compares similar masterpieces to appreciate the difference between them and his own works. As long as the big differences are improved, great progress can be made, which is a timely help. As for small differences, they are generally the icing on the cake, and as long as you can't see it yourself, it may be difficult for most people to see it. Prioritize the pursuit of timely help, and only add icing on the cake when the level reaches a higher bottleneck.

I have read it 7.8 Times, and I still have an impression. This book..., The author has the time, so he might as well update it

Let's not talk about the writing. I will give six stars for the author's perseverance in pulling people off. I will not add the remaining star.

Being the best man, can I be single? I'm waiting online, it's very urgent 😳 With such short legs, it would be a pity not to board a tricycle.

"Look at me" "Look at me" "Look at me" "It hasn't been updated for a month, what are you looking at?"

How should I put it? As a book friend said, it is suitable for students who have just read novels. The author is also a novice and his writing style is also very immature. How should I put it, the author's way of shaping the characters' personalities and images is a bit simple, and sometimes it is even unclear what the priorities are. People can have many emotions in a state, but there must be one that dominates. For example, in the beginning, when someone was stuck in a room looking for self-defense weapons, you found underwear. You shouldn't write that he grabbed it and looked at it, because you have written before that the protagonist is an innocent and shy person who does not even dare to look at a seductive woman. Later, he grabbed other people's underwear and admired it in front of others. This is not a good portrayal of the protagonist's state at that time. The shaping of the head of the family and the great elder was also unsuccessful. I guess it's because the author has no life experience and depicts people too simply. It is recommended to read more novels with old coins. It is not to write about people who are very thoughtful, but at least they will not express their emotions directly when encountering things. They should be patient and wait for a decision before taking action. For example, when the protagonist comes out of the room, the head of the house can frown first, show a little momentum to show his anger, and then introduce himself with some tough behavior, and then ask the protagonist who he is, where he comes from, how it is related to what happened before, and whether he has seen my daughter. As the head of the family, you won't get excited when you see a person who appears suddenly. You need to be smart. As soon as you see the protagonist, you should think of the possibility that he might be the kind of person who pretends to be a pig and eats the tiger, instead of thinking about this possibility after doing something that offends others. I hope the author can read some other great novels to improve his writing skills.