Douluo: Reincarnated as Leosley, Punishing Evildoers with Fear

After exiting, I thought about it for a while but felt uncomfortable without saying anything, so I came back again. I saw Chapter 54, and there weren't many flaws. One was that in Chapter 9, the Evil Fire Chicken made several rude remarks to the Duke and Higvin without any punishment. In Chapter 54, Catwoman was named Lynette. The first one was okay, but the second one, is it so difficult for you to come up with a name? Do you have to use someone else's name for her? It's so baffling. Isn't this disrespectful to everyone? You picked up a cat on the road and named the cat after a random person in your WeChat contacts? I can only say that those who can accept it can watch it, and those who can't accept it can be moisturized like me.

What's not to be learned? Name Catwoman after someone she knows next door. Isn't your article wholesale from a studio? Can't you go on without writing about that cute Catwoman? The plots of several books are exactly the same, but I don't know how to write them quickly. I can't even copy them from the ready-made books. Let's see how long you can write about this broken auction and this sexy catwoman.

The main female lead is Chao Tianxiang. She must be the main character from Long Gong, otherwise I won't watch it.

I am here to call the polar bear, come and see the Duke of Merlot Petersburg (husband for short) who was built a long time ago.

Finished reading, progress to chapter 44 Let me talk about some problems that I can see personally: In terms of character dialogue, don't deliberately insert some spoken language. The most prominent example is Xuexing's Beijing accent that suddenly popped out. There is no funny knowing smile, just drama. The behavioral logic completely fits the character and is not forced. No one has the same character in mind. In terms of writing logic, the connection of some paragraphs is very problematic. The upper and lower paragraphs cannot be connected, so relevant information cannot appear in the mind, leaving the reader confused. And the extension of some settings is too long, the explanations are complicated, and to put it bluntly, the writing is boring. In fact, as long as more names + actions are used and the characters' actions are connected, there will be no shortage of words or lack of text, and the reading will also have a sense of picture. Although the plot and word count are the same, the reading feeling is different (I am deliberately lazy). In terms of choosing words and sentences, the amount of rhetoric in the first chapter persuaded me to put it off once. Reading the whole article did not play the role of introducing the characters and the environment, and it disrupted the readers' imagination of the scene. They could not even see what the characters were doing. Please fix the previous ones when you have time, otherwise most people will just slip away. In fact, the writing is not too naive, and the dialogue does not have much written language or too much colloquialism. These two points can make many people feel comfortable watching it. I hope you can work hard. After all, it's only chapter 44 now. Just don't make any mistakes in the plot in the future.

As long as the author can keep going, let alone enter the palace, there will definitely be a big gift for him. By the way, change that title, Ice Fist really doesn't sound good.

But there are still a few small flaws, which may be flaws to me, but are normal to others. Just when you were fucking Tang Hao, why did you agree to change? What qualifications does he have to make demands? At that time, he was lucky to be alive, and he was still qualified to make demands, and the protagonist agreed. I think this is a little poisonous point, because I see that now, no matter who plays Zhongli or whoever plays, they will agree. Feel very unhappy

It's such a disgusting operation to give the names of people you know to people in another world. This kind of original god character travels to Douluo Continent. The plot of each book is exactly the same, which is disgusting.

It's really not very good, the character is almost too good.

This book is like half-digested food, neither shit nor food.