Original God, Demon God War Starts

It's pretty good in the original Shenwen. I hope it doesn't involve eunuchs.

The vocabulary is too repetitive, it seems, as if, as if, maybe... And so on

Urgent update, no update for ten days!

The author is currently sorting out the plot of Gan Yuanshen. Fu Jin must be saved! ! !

After reading Golden Chapter 3, let me share my thoughts: First of all, there's nothing wrong with the plot at the beginning. After all, I've only read three chapters and still can't tell anything. However, the author's paragraphing and punctuation are a bit sloppy. For example, when introducing authority in the middle of the second chapter, the introduction of Yan can be divided into one paragraph, the introduction of Feng can be divided into one paragraph, and so on. Don't crowd them all together. Don't crowd them all together. Don't crowd them all together (Can you imagine the feeling of a page full of words? It hurts your eyes after reading for a long time) Just use normal punctuation. Be sure to add colons, otherwise it will appear too dense. You can divide it into paragraphs after one person has said what he needs to say, which will make it look neater. In short, there are no major problems with the plot, but the writing style is relatively immature, and the paragraphing and punctuation cannot be well controlled, and the narrative ability is also relatively bloated. However, these are all problems common to novices and can be practiced slowly.

Good idea, next time... Keep thinking≧∇≦

So the last book was full of noise again?

Why is Fei Si's last book too late again?

I read a little bit, and it's okay. At least I'm not biased. It's the most attentive Genshin Impact fanfic I've ever seen.

I feel this is a very good book, one of the few that I like.