Want Me to Rejoin the Party? Keep Dreaming!

If you read a novel for a long time, you might have this feeling: "I feel like I've seen this story somewhere before?" This indicates that the stories in the novels share common elements. Otherwise, this feeling wouldn't exist. The term "formula" was invented to confirm this feeling, and various other formulas are summarized as "face-slapping and showing off" or "playing dumb to fool others." Novels about characters leaving the team are no exception; they also have fixed formulas, one of which is dual narrative: specifically, due to the protagonist's departure from the team, the entire story is split in two—the protagonist starts a new life, becoming one plotline; the former teammates continue their old lives, also becoming another plotline; and finally...

This behavior of hers is like being a "welfare girl" on Twitter.

If the author were to read the comments, I would say that pleasing everyone is never the problem; the important thing is the character development. For example, the issues mentioned below, like photoshoots and boyfriend problems, no matter how amazing the main storyline is, if a character has a flaw, it can turn off many readers. As long as the author doesn't touch upon or test readers' weaknesses, the book will definitely succeed. The author must pay attention to these things. I wish the author continued success and good results! [E]

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(No offense intended, I've read up to chapter 35, speaking from the perspective of someone with a certain level of fastidiousness.) Trenisia has done pornographic photoshoots and had a "trainee boyfriend." These two plot points depend on individual tolerance; those who can accept them are probably still reading. The "leaving the team" trope really tests an author's plot design. Many readers enjoy the glimpse of a veiled woman, followed by lifelong regret or remorse, then the protagonist's arduous journey and relentless pursuit of the male lead to enter the harem.

The "oppose full acceptance" faction raises its little paws.

Judging from the writing style so far, the author must have given considerable thought to the story's structure and world-building. However, the question is also clear: is the interpretation of the "leaving the team" narrative a compromise made to the market environment? The answer should be quite obvious. Therefore, the doubts raised about the story's structural arrangement are not merely "understandable," but rather an inevitable consequence. The following analysis will focus on two aspects from the reader's perspective: the main storyline and the daily life stories. As a novel about leaving the team, the main storyline's design features have already been clearly explained in another long review, so I won't repeat them here. What I want to raise is the question of "world-building..."

Support! Support! As long as an author updates, they're a good author. After all, in this world where no one updates their work, finishing a novel is a luxury...

If the author truly intended this to be a male-oriented novel, then this character, to put it mildly, is overly developed; to put it bluntly, he's one of the novel's biggest flaws, incorporating most of the typical pitfalls and tropes of male-oriented fiction. If you don't read it, it's fine; but if you do, it will deter a large number of readers.

Because the plot of this book is too outrageous and its grades are terrible, I need some practical advice. Please let me know if I need to release character profiles, world-building information, or major event chronologies containing spoilers in advance; or if there are any parts that are riddles and need to be explained; or if I need to create a group.