The Young Guy's Superpowered Life

Becoming a two-dimensional being... I used to dream of breaking down the dimensional barrier to escape the three-dimensional world, but now I've figured it out and I'm not so obsessed anymore. Although I still cry while watching anime, still cry like a baby for my favorite characters, and still say the two-dimensional world is too warm and the three-dimensional world is too cold, I also have things in the three-dimensional world that I cherish and am responsible for. I will work hard for the two-dimensional world, to be a beloved one, to try to break down the dimensional barrier, to write novels and do cosplay—all to get a little closer to them... I feel like I'm going off-topic... Ah, whatever, I'm just here to support this post.

"My Name is Doug, and I'm a Cat" is here! A light novel with an anime/manga style, want to check it out? I'll keep your anime/manga dreams alive!

Today I was struggling to choose a writing app, and there was one called Orange Writing. The first person I thought of was Sister Orange (橘子姐). In memory of Sister Orange's support, I'm using this app. How about it? Praise me, praise me, praise me now! Oh, and I've already switched to Tangyuan Creation. Hehe.

I came to visit Sister Orange after finishing my writing. The most important thing for a writer is to persevere. As long as it's not a bad ending, you should finish it. Keep it up!

Come support Sister Orange! (Sprinkling flowers)

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The Ironclad Republic, together with "The Vast Universe," returns the visit. Keep up the good work, and you'll surely become a god!

Long time no see, do you still remember me?

First of all, I want to say... You've already finished writing, why did you call me here?! Holy crap... Good idea, very novel! The synopsis is also attractive... Judging from the character portrayal, you've put in a lot of effort and hard work. Keep it up, you can refer to my opinion! Enough with the pleasantries, let's get down to business. Honestly, seeing so many people like this book, I almost feel bad for being a critic. I just showed your first chapter to a thirteen-year-old writer. She just said, "It's almost the same as what I wrote in sixth grade..." You're probably speechless, but that's exactly what the first chapter is like. As a first chapter, it's fine to be ornate, but you went too far, and most of the words were wrong... For example: "The sunlight shone domineeringly on my body..." Domineering, speechless. Is it strange that the girl wears a black robe later? The biggest flaw is the battle description: what's the point of your interrogative sentences? You should use rhetorical questions instead!! And it's too wordy, not concise enough... Learn from Tiancan Tudou... Finally, there's the dialogue problem... The final dialogue between the male and female leads doesn't match at all. What's with the guy just saying his name?! The girl didn't ask, did she?! Would a normal person be so silly? For example, if I don't know you and am writing a book review for you, and then you suddenly say your name is Sister Orange... That's just plain crazy! The scene transitions are too abrupt, and some character descriptions are excessive. To put it nicely, it's overly detailed; to put it bluntly, there's too much unnecessary dialogue. The transitions between events are also too stiff. Before moving on to the next event, there should be some explanation in the middle of the previous one, so the later events don't feel abrupt... You should be able to find my novel on the forum... You can check it out in the recommended posts on 17K... "The Deletion on the Snow Mountain," I hope it helps! Good luck! I hope you're not discouraged by my comment.

SuSu is here to shower you with flowers! Another girl writing for male-oriented fiction, amazing! Thumbs up!