I Wish to Question the Heavens

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After reading the first three chapters, I noticed a few issues. 1. The issue of paragraphing: If a paragraph is too long, it's best to keep it to about three or four lines, ideally no more than five lines, when writing online novels. Paragraphs that are too long can cause reader fatigue. 2. The pacing is a bit slow, and the highlights of the first three chapters aren't particularly prominent. The first three chapters are supposed to be the golden three chapters! So I hope the author will pay more attention to this aspect. 3. A chapter of just over a thousand words is indeed a bit short; a chapter of a male-oriented novel should be at least two thousand words or more. The above are purely personal opinions; please refrain from criticism if you disagree.

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I think the story in the introduction needs improvement. The specific problems are logical flaws and the order of the narrative, which I won't criticize here. I'll just list the settings I think are correct. First, a dark organization shrouds the world, wielding immense power and controlling everything. It has countless experts, and its leader is incredibly powerful. Three reclusive masters, seeing the widespread suffering, are moved by compassion and join forces to fight it. However, the leader of the dark organization is incredibly powerful, and the three masters fight to the death, severely injuring him. Of course, the three masters, on the verge of death, achieve perfect merit and are guided by the Heavenly Dao to become celestial immortals. However, the three masters cannot let go of the remnants of the dark organization, so they use their immortality as a bargaining chip to exchange for the opportunity to be reincarnated. Finally, when inquiring about an elder's health, one should speak sincerely and naturally. The elder should also have the heart to share the burden of their children. "Dad, you are not well yet, you should rest more." The protagonist quickly put down what they were doing, took three steps at a time to come to their father, and helped their father into the house. The old man's hand, which had been being supported, grasped the protagonist's hand, while his free hand trembled and shook it. "It's alright, it's alright! Your father has something to tell you..."

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