Starting with a County of My Own

Correcting the mistakes I made in the past: 1. Even while charging on horseback, no matter how fast the horse or what kind of sword or blade it is (assuming it's one-handed), it cannot cut through the armor, and the rider may even fall off the horse due to the reaction force. 2. According to the description in "Trials of War: A History of the Crusades", Christianity also recognizes Jesus and other Christian saints from 610 years ago as saints. I forgot which chapter made this mistake, please correct me!

I took a quick look. First, there's the issue of the introduction; it's too long. Also, if you're going to write such a long introduction, it's best to break it into more paragraphs, otherwise it'll be tiring to read. And the best introduction is one that highlights the article's key points and interesting aspects. You don't need to describe the entire article. Then I read the first chapter, and you spent most of it introducing the game's setting, which was quite dry. This is unavoidable. You not only crammed all the dry stuff together, but the text was also dense. If someone like me, with little patience, were to give up, it might be off-putting. You could gradually weave the setting and other details in later chapters, instead of condensing them all at once. Finally, I noticed that you mentioned something in the first chapter, namely the mass disappearance of people in "The Age of Cold Weapons." This reminded me of a novel, and this point is similar to that novel. That novel is quite good; you can check it out. It's called "The Game of Broken Dreams" by Xi Ge. (The above are just my personal opinions)

First of all, congratulations to the author on reaching 300,000 words! That's fantastic! The author's subject matter is also excellent. But! I might be a bit blunt, author, please don't be offended if you don't like it. I glanced at this book; it's about book transfers or game travel—both popular types of online novels these days. You didn't capitalize on the pacing and its current popularity. Let me take a look at your first three chapters. The word count is okay, but a little low. Two thousand words would be better, because the first three chapters are crucial for keeping readers engaged. So it's very important! Secondly, your punctuation is a bit problematic. Dividing a large article into only two paragraphs is confusing, and readers will likely abandon it if they see such a format. It is recommended to write one sentence or one paragraph, with no more than 75 characters, ideally between 15 and 45. If it's not easy to revise, I suggest you revise the first three chapters first. Now let's talk about why you didn't use the element of "fire". Transmigration novels and games are most popular because of system novels or cheat codes, right? That's what makes them so appealing and worth reading. I don't know if they'll appear later, but if they don't appear in the first three chapters, they're basically doomed. If it's just a suspense novel, it won't work without high-scoring plot points. No matter how well the later parts are written, at least don't let the earlier readers turn them away. The author's word choice and sentence structure are fantastic! I could almost picture it in the first paragraph of the first chapter. It would be even better if the sentence breaks were a little better. You can change the cover when you have the money! (๑´ڡ`๑) I think you can take a look at the covers of the top male idols; the cover really is important too. Finally, I wish you great success in your endeavors! (This is an advertisement; bookmark it so you don't get lost!)

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Brother, it's been a while since you've been here. I've missed you! Come on, let's keep up the good work and move forward together!

Although I'm not interested in game-related novels, your enthusiasm and persistence are commendable; you're doing great!

The first 38 chapters of this book might be a bit challenging, so please proceed with caution! The writing style and logic improve significantly in the chapters after chapter 38. If you still find it challenging, start reading from Volume Two, "In the Name of the Father."

The author of "Defying the Path to Slay Gods" has come to read your work. I've added it to my favorites to show my support. In your spare time, you are welcome to visit back, comment, and share with each other. Let's cheer each other on.

Excellent! I strongly support your popularity! You're so popular and famous! I'm here to learn from you again. Do you remember me?