The Mute Girl as Bait

Seeing Bai Cai promoting her book again, I smiled, clicked on it, and casually gave it a one-star review. Thinking about how Bai Cai was secretly pleased with herself for giving it three stars, I suddenly felt a pang of emptiness. Sigh, the life of a top critic is so simple, unpretentious, and monotonous.

Your writing is great for careful reading and rereading, but it's also very heartbreaking.

You're throwing knives again! You're throwing knives again! Waaaaah, so early in the morning... I feel so sorry for Amin, so sorry for the General... If you're lacking inspiration, you could listen to some music, especially classical Chinese style songs, or poems about war, like "Yu Gui" or "Hao Li Xing." You could also read books on the subject; the Book of Songs contains many similar poems. Keep up the good work, author! I'm waiting for your updates. Please stop with the angst, waaaaah!

I really like your writing style, but there are a few issues. The timeline feels unclear, and it was a bit confusing after reading it. Also, after Amin went missing, you didn't describe the situation at Amin's home. Since she was born late in life, her father should have gone to look for her after she went missing, but you didn't describe that at all. In addition, Amin is born deaf and mute. Generally, deaf and mute people cannot hear others speaking and can only communicate with them through gestures. If not, they won't speak, but will use gestures, because they need to communicate with the people around them. Not everyone can read lips, and it's also a matter of habit. Maybe I didn't understand what you meant. Keep up the good work, everyone!

Blade.

The paragraphs are too long and need to be shortened. Chapter One contains too much description. It's like listening to the author tell a story from God's perspective. There's no sense of immersion, my friend. This doesn't feel like reading a novel; it feels like listening to someone tell a story. I suggest the author take a look at the top-ranked works on the female-oriented online literature charts. Don't just describe her every move; instead, use her actions, expressions, and the dialogue of supporting characters to indirectly portray or depict what kind of person she is. Avoid writing entirely without dialogue.

What to do if the boss doesn't update?

Blade!!!!

Why isn't it updating?

Cai Cha, I've added your book to my book recommendation list. Take a look when you have time! ^_^