The Road to Immortality in a Spirit-Qi World

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There were many problems at the beginning, but it got better and better as it went on. Some of the later chapters were a bit filler, probably due to the author dozing off while typing at night. Keep it up, I'll continue to support you.

The punctuation is poorly used; too many periods make the text feel disjointed. Additionally, there are too few commas for sentence breaks, making it difficult to connect sentences. This is a recurring problem for newcomers – focusing too much on vocabulary.

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I get up early to read and look forward to the new book.

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A very solid novel. The traditional approach of gradually becoming stronger from the start is quite good. The fact that the cultivation system and worldview are not explained at the beginning makes it clear to the reader. I support it!

You made me want to rant! First of all, the pacing is too fast. You could have written more about the old man's expressions, which would have established his status. The protagonist's appearance and anticipation should have been described from the beginning. Later, when the protagonist breaks the crystal ball, you could have described the old man's expression! Also, the protagonist's fear and anxiety, and how that manifested on his face, would have revealed what kind of person the protagonist is, showcasing his personality and temperament. The beginning was too weak. Okay, rant over.

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