Fated Calamity

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The plot moves quickly, but letting the protagonist win and get the prize so easily reduces the excitement. Adding obstacles and conflicts to highlight the protagonist's awesomeness would make it more enjoyable to watch.

The plot is good, but the writing seems somewhat lacking. After reading the author's introduction, from Lin An to Lin Jie, I'm still a bit curious: why is he the one who caused his family's destruction? Some people are also curious as to why this child was handed over to Lin Ming. Anyway, there are many pitfalls for readers to discover. Keep it up, Dada!

The plot is great, and the descriptions in all aspects are very well done. Keep it up!

Seeing such a high word count but poor performance, I read dozens of chapters and realized why. The author's writing style in the beginning was still somewhat immature, lacking immersion. The plot was good, but the writing didn't support it. The author needs to accumulate more experience. I suggest revising the beginning, not just the plot, but also the descriptions throughout. Keep it up! I hope the mouse will give me a chance to compete this week. I'll definitely watch it next week and then send a long review. Keep following my "Ice Devouring Path"!

The writing is excellent; I've already saved it. I'll definitely study it carefully when I have time. Keep it up!

The author's writing skills are very solid. After reading three or four chapters, I feel that the overall readability is still very high. I will bookmark it for now and continue reading when I have time.

Excellent, and the content is very original. Thumbs up to the author!

Nice writing, I've saved it. Let's chat over tea sometime!

Keep it up!