Late March

The novel lacks a clear concept of time and should use a standard method of dating, such as the number of years in the Hongwu reign. Referencing ancient dating methods would suit your writing style. The cultivation levels in the novel should be clearly defined; you could refer to mythological cultivation novels, since yours is likely also a cultivation-themed work. You need to figure out how to define combat power, otherwise it will easily become inconsistent later on. You could add an introduction before the first chapter, introducing the world's structure, timeline, combat power levels, and some scenes from the protagonist's previous life, or his grudges and conflicts with other characters.

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The synopsis is already quite interesting; I suggest breaking it down into smaller paragraphs instead of piling up so much dialogue for a better reading experience.