Yu Jin's Heartfelt Words

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Why do chapters not pass muster when writing a novel?

On a whim, I started a thread for minor characters... [I won't tell you the author is terrible at naming things, hmph!] Format: Name: Gender: Age: Identity: Hobbies: Personality: Notes: [Of course, not all will be selected; choices will depend on the plot.]

Forehead… I read the first volume; the theme and writing style are exactly what I like. But towards the end, there were some parts I didn't quite understand. How should I put it... It's like there was too much buildup in the beginning, but the ending felt rushed. The last chapter revealed too much information, which was hard to accept (well, maybe my own lack of intelligence played a part too |ω·). And those two sisters at the end, they inexplicably made up because of a single sentence from the female lead... It feels a bit abrupt (to be honest, I'm not even entirely clear on the contradictions between these two stories~ lol). The story is somewhat similar to "Floating Life," but it also has its own unique characteristics. Honestly, I really don't expect the author to be so old; writing something like this at this age is really quite impressive... Sigh, I've rambled on for quite a while now...

I just wanted to ask, how old is the author? ^^

Excellent writing, keep it up! I've put your comment in the forum replies, remember to check it!

Kuoyi

Keep it up, it's great!

I've finished reading the first five chapters, and I'll send my flowers later. First, I think the beginning is quite good, but there are some unrealistic parts. First, the Empress Dowager's age needs to be changed. Even if the story requires it, the Empress Dowager couldn't possibly be that young. She should be at least fifteen. Second, I'm speechless about the teahouse character design and the story in the first volume. I initially thought it was quite good, but the more I read, the more I felt it was wrong. Author, you know, the female lead is easily seen as interesting and intriguing, which is unrealistic and even feels like a cheat code. Secondly, regarding the Underworld's Meng Po (the Goddess of Forgetfulness), I have to say, the Underworld changes leadership so quickly; a new ghost is already taking over. Also, the work in the Underworld seems so easy; you can leave anytime. Furthermore, entering and leaving the Underworld is so easy, it looks like a game. Finally, two women love one man, the original wife inexplicably commits suicide, and the concubine seduces the Emperor—I'm speechless about this. Honestly, I initially thought it was quite good, with a touch of freshness that kept me interested. But as I read on, I suddenly realized it was following the same old formula, and the vocabulary and phrasing were a bit ordinary, losing its freshness. The work itself is alright, but after reading so many books, I've really lost interest. Good luck, author!

The word count is too short to reveal much, but I'll point out two minor issues: First, the paragraphing—some parts that should have been split into two paragraphs didn't need to be connected. Second, the numbers—the writing has a strong classical Chinese feel, but using Chinese characters for numbers would have made it more authentic. That's all for now, keep updating, and I wish you a speedy signing of a contract.