Reborn as a Substitute Heiress

First criticize, then praise: My first impression of the first chapter was that it was incredibly melodramatic and nonsensical. You could have made the descriptions more detailed and specific; it took me a while to understand it. I felt your writing was strange, with a strong sense of formulaic plot and a detachment from reality. I didn't really get into it (referring to the first chapter; the later chapters were much better). I think you could have made the characters' dialogue more realistic. Why would someone be standing next to a car? You clearly stated earlier that the car was waiting at a traffic light. The argument between the two characters was like that of children, and the parting was too abrupt, feeling like the plot was abruptly cut off. Also, I felt the pacing was too jumpy and strange. (These are just my thoughts after reading the first chapter.) It's much better than the first chapter, and the plot isn't too fast, but there are occasional jumps in the narrative. To be honest, I felt the female lead's brother's character was a little bit odd, but it's not a big deal. There are quite a few typos. On the second page of the second chapter, you wrote "is" instead of "is impossible". There are also other typos. Please pay attention to them when you write. I've noticed a certain quality to your writing, both in the descriptions and the dialogue. It might be a Japanese style, I feel, it's very unique. Or it could be some other style, but it feels very fresh to me. I feel that the other chapters, except for the first one, are also quite good. Your writing style is very unique, so even those clichéd plots don't seem so old-fashioned under your pen. Also, the male lead's character is quite special; it's more like something you'd see in a TV series than in a novel. After seeing so many overpowered male leads, this character is refreshing. The later chapters were also quite well-written and enjoyable. I hope you write better and better; the key is to keep at it. (Finally, I'll shamelessly recommend this book. Read it when you have time, no pressure, thanks 😊)

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