Desire Sets the Heavens Ablaze

First, Brother Yun Fengtian is a very good person. Second, Brother Yun Fengtian's novels are excellent. His works and mine share some similarities and differences. There are many similarities, of course. The main themes that Yun Fengtian's novels aim to express are quite similar to those I want to express. Yun Fengtian's writing style is actually quite good; his descriptive style is quite similar to mine. You could say we're kindred spirits. Some of the battle scenes in Chen Mo's fantasy novels are also similar to Yun Fengtian's—not much direct description, but mainly using the enemy's "fear" or their utter defeat to highlight the protagonist's superiority. However, this overuse of poetic language not only prevents the battle scenes from being fully realized, but also results in a different reader experience compared to the author. Such an opening might seem exciting and impressive, but different people will have different feelings. Nowadays, readers who enjoy "feel-good" stories are all about the thrill. If it's written like this, readers need to first conjure up an image of a hero charging ahead and cutting through thousands of enemies. If there's too little description of the protagonist on horseback, readers can only think of it as a horse. Without the author's passion, they can't feel the bloodshed of the battlefield, the fervor of the warriors, or, most importantly, the protagonist's awesomeness. (At least that's what I think.) I think Yun Fengtian could take a look at Jiang Nan's "Dragon Raja." "Dragon Raja" is a story about a loser, so why is it so popular? Because it's aimed at young people. What do young people want? One person fighting against several others is no longer enough to satisfy their needs. The "pretending to be weak to eat the strong" and "overpowering others to kill" tropes have been overused. That's when "Dragon Raja" came out. "Dragon Raja" has a lot of (tu cao, a Chinese internet slang term for sarcastic or humorous commentary), it's close to the lives of ordinary people, and the climax in the later stages is incredibly exciting. Each climax in "Dragon Raja" is relatively short, only about 500-1000 words, but why is it so enjoyable to read? Because the protagonist is personally involved in the climax. In Lu Mingfei's climax, there are also a few paragraphs describing the enemy and the environment, but the descriptions are very concise. There are more descriptions of Lu Mingfei himself, which allows the reader to enter the author's imagination black hole and naturally start to imagine the scenes in the novel. The more you imagine, the more you want to read. "The Demon's Desire Burns the Heavens," firstly, its opening is actually quite good, much better than the popular essays of today. The beginning tells the story of the protagonist single-handedly killing a bunch of soldiers; this formula is undeniably catchy and enjoyable, and the opening is certainly entertaining. The writing is also very good. However, the sense of immersion isn't very strong. Unlike "Dragon Raja," where even a short passage can evoke a strong feeling of connection and resonance, there are some things to pay attention to. For example, the wording. In the first chapter, when the armored soldiers approach, the "sound of steel rubbing" seems inappropriate. Steel rubbing? Isn't steel supposed to be a collision? Normally, medieval heavily armored soldiers would also collide, their heavy armor being made of leather at the joints. And "steel"? Not many people write like this, right? Usually, it's just about metal, or even more directly, like this: "Clang, clang, a dense, rhythmic clashing of metal, large and small, came from afar, carrying a chilling, extremely desolate aura." And the "calm" in the protagonist's eyes is completely drained? How was the calm drained? It would be better to describe it like this: "Qin Tianjin smiled wickedly, his calm expression replaced by an extremely sharp killing intent. Qin Tianjin's aura instantly changed, becoming terrifying, becoming cold." As for the fishbone comb part, I think the language could be more concise. If the author wanted to express contempt for the enemy, there was no need for such a description. And what's with the twin tails and single ponytail? Yun Fengtian, you're so melodramatic! "Your stealth is meaningless"—since you're already being melodramatic, why not just go all the way and write "You know nothing about power"? In Chapter Two, when the protagonist stroked the horse, the horse walked away. His tears were "long-planned." Firstly, the author didn't tell us why he suddenly burst into tears. Chen Mo was completely bewildered. And what about the saying that a man doesn't easily shed tears? Since the author depicts the protagonist as a wolf, why is he crying like a fox? This will give readers two different feelings. Those who aren't paying attention won't care, but those who are will find it awkward. Why would a grown man cry? It directly lowers the protagonist's image in the reader's mind. It's supposed to be a satisfying story; crying ruins the momentum. "Long-planned" is a derogatory term, and its use here feels very strange to Chen Mo. If he's crying, fine, but what does "long-planned" mean? Either don't use it at all, or use a different word or method. For example, "The moisture that welled up in his eyes eventually condensed into glistening tears, which slid down his cheeks and were gently carried away by the breeze." And what about the "Shadow Strike Assault Team"? Besides the ridiculously over-the-top name, have you ever seen an assault team in the world called "Shadow Strike" that wears heavy armor? If it's "Shadow Strike," then it should be either leather or light armor. Heavy armor is usually worn by knights, not to mention it's too heavy. As for Chapter 3, is the protagonist cute? And there are typos. Everyone makes typos, whether on a phone or a computer. If you type too fast, there will be a lot. For example, the old man looking at the protagonist has an extra "zai," so there are two. Anyway, these are just Chen Mo's personal thoughts. Yun Fengtian's novels are very good, and please also check out Chen Mo's "Me and My Zombie Sister."

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