The Lord of the Heavens Rules the World

Seeing the comments, I understand that you've supported me, so thank you. It's normal for us little guys to have few or no readers. I've stopped promoting it and am going to focus on writing for a while. I've already adjusted my mindset and am treating it like writing a novel for myself. You've written twice as many words as me, so a major overhaul now is unrealistic. If you want to get a contract, you should revise the first three to five chapters. I revised about fifty chapters of mine to varying degrees. I wasn't satisfied with the first few chapters and was too lazy to work on them anymore. My advice is that if you want a contract, you need to force yourself to revise while continuously updating. Grit your teeth, calm down, and remember this is a process you need to go through. I revised the first few chapters more than ten times, until I felt like I was going to throw up from all the revisions, and I stopped when I realized I couldn't revise them any further. Actually, nobody wants to revise their own work; everyone thinks they're good. It's understandable for people to be a little overconfident. But when you look back at your work after a while, when you've improved, you'll realize that the earlier parts were indeed poorly written, at least not as good as you hoped. That's how I felt. I think my book only started to improve after about ten chapters. Now, although I rarely revise repeatedly, it's relatively smoother. So, I strongly suggest revising your writing a little bit whenever you have time. This isn't about negating anything; it's about strengthening and surpassing yourself. Also, to be more specific, I read a few chapters of "Jia Yun Like the Wind" and "People Are in High Spirits When They Have Good Things Happen." Here's a tip: it's best to leave some suspense at the end of each chapter. This way, at least the few readers who are still following our book will want to continue reading. In Jia Yun's chapter, the ending was just the banquet ending. If you could add some conflict or suddenly have some urgent news arrive, that would create suspense. Keep it up! @DemonKiller

That's so childish... Speechless.

Fantasy novel...

The article is original; I'll give it my support.

Good evening and keep it up!

Go! Go! Go! (Repeat this important slogan three times!)

I won't say anything more, just give the author a 6!

Good afternoon, brother proletarian.

Goodnight, proletarian brother. I changed my profile picture, what do you think? (A little expectant glint in her eyes)

[Read Carefully] Dear Proletarian, Lian'er has a few small observations. First, the characters seem fragmented. For example, in the opening chapters, a common problem is that a character performs an action, and in the next paragraph, the same character appears and performs another action. In the third paragraph, another character appears, also only performing one action. This writing style is common, but it has a hidden flaw: the transition between the two characters. It's not about deliberately emphasizing the appearance of another person, but rather that there should be a response between their actions. For example, if A kneels before B, and B immediately helps A up, then the two actions together form a single scene. Second, some parts of the plot seem redundant, perhaps due to embellishment. Lian'er certainly doesn't object to embellishment, as it can make the story more vivid and moving; however, conciseness and succinctness are also desirable. A good work cannot be entirely...