God King of the Illusory Realm

The characters introduced by the strange phenomena in Peach Blossom Village are quite interesting, but the protagonist's young age is a major drawback. A protagonist who starts too young limits the main plot and the protagonist in many ways. If the main plot can't develop properly, it puts the story at a disadvantage compared to other stories that quickly get to the main plot. Therefore, the development of the main plot is crucial, as is the drama and excitement of the opening. How to capture the reader's attention is very important. This is even more crucial for commercial writing, where the competition begins from the very first step. So, I think the protagonist's age needs to be increased, at least to fifteen years old. Also, the protagonist's special abilities are something to look forward to. Scene transitions should be natural without adding special symbols. The story's scale is grand, and the style is somewhat different from other Eastern fantasy novels. Personally, I'm looking forward to the protagonist's personal growth. Keep writing! Support rating (out of 2 points): 1. Fluent writing with precise word choice and rich vocabulary +2 2. The narrative thread is clear but complex and drawn out +1 3. Dramatic conflicts/turning points appear in the plot but are not obvious +1 4. Character details and character portrayal are vivid but not lively and full-bodied +1 5. The dialogue is vivid and natural +1 6. The world view/props, equipment, and skills are old settings, but the angle of explanation/usage is somewhat novel +1 7. The ending of a passage or chapter has suspense but is not obvious +1 ——Gu Xia Jiucheng, full-time review tutor at NetEase Literature University. If you would like to have one-on-one communication with an instructor and receive one-on-one guidance, please apply to become a student in the one-on-one tutoring class of NetEase Literature University's Youth Training Academy. We will accompany you all the way until you succeed. Registration address: http://bbs.17k.com/thread-2880278-1-1.html We hope that authors will not stop updating and insist on originality. If authors have original works on other websites outside of 17k but have not yet signed a contract and want to seek writing advice, they can directly apply in their tutoring post. NetEase Literature University's Youth Training Academy will provide completely free tutoring services.

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