The Outlaws of Great Yan

The sixth-grade third master can't beat the eighth-grade Batur? And in the previous two chapters, you have already stated that the third master had snatched Princess Linglong from Hu Yanyingjun. Why did another news suddenly come that the third master was in the hands of Batulu? What are you writing? Confusion appears every few chapters, confusion appears every few chapters, and you still write a crappy novel

What to say! Going round and round and returning to the starting point, millions of words of foreshadowing, get rid of ☞). The protagonist is finally sublimated, with a tiger in his heart and a scent of roses.

The narration is too heavy, 80% of it is describing this description and that background. Skip the description and read the plot for 1 minute and 1 chapter...

It would take two chapters to explain one sentence, which is unimaginably long-winded.

Hello, author, I know you want to describe the details, but for a little character who is completely brushed off, you wish you could describe the color of her underwear vividly. I think it is not necessary. If this supporting character is related to the main task, write more main points. I read several pages and I can't get through a single plot. Alas...

The subject matter is not bad, and the story itself is also good, but it is a pity that the author does not know whether it is to make up for the word count, or because of proficiency issues, or logical difficulties. Every time a storyline of less than 200 words is advanced, more than 1,000 words of introductions to various premises, backgrounds, derivative plots, etc. Are required. Many of them are repeated over and over again.

I've said a lot before, so let's talk about making soap.

There are too many narrations and everything needs to be introduced.

It feels like it's filled with words

The storyline progressed too slowly and there were too many narrations. After reading it for a long time, I was still confused.