My Diary of Cultivating Immortality Among Mortals

It's annoying to watch the women being collected in the back. It would be better to remove the women if she is a bitch. It's a pity.

There are too many women in the back

What a damn beautiful young lady, she can't write and she can't do anything with her words.

It's too messy and has no beginning or end, it's uncomfortable to watch, and it doesn't feel smooth at all.

It's all copied and pasted content. The preface doesn't match the postscript, and the content is inconsistent. One moment, Wu Chou is dead, and the next, he's resurrected.

The plot is quite confusing and a lot different from the original work. For example, in the original work, people like the Tian Bu Tian Dan Ji Yin didn't know what the effect was and thought it only increased longevity.

Don't change the basic settings casually when writing a fanfic. During the Qi training period, the light will disappear. And why do you write a plot with a character like Duobao Girl? It just looks disgusting.

The protagonist is so cowardly that she is still a virgin! With a simulated future system and a familiarity with the plot, you are still afraid of this and that. The answers have been written for you. You are still eager to seize the opportunity but dare not. You want to take Nangong but are afraid, so you can just stay in the sect!

It doesn't matter if it's a woman

Why is there no emotional timbre?