Only the Starry Sky Can Be Swallowed

Short story, completed Advantages: The characters are successfully created, the plot design is passable, the golden finger is more innovative, the emotional flow is guided smoothly, and there are few logic bugs. Disadvantages: The protagonist does not respect martial arts, treats life and danger with the mentality of a primary school student on an outing, and the style of painting suddenly changes to OOC.

Martial Arts Swallowing the Starry Sky is being serialized Advantages: Uses ax weapons, the protagonist is well portrayed, the plot is well designed, and the emotional guidance is smooth. I know the original work relatively well. There are few bugs in the original work, few logic bugs, and no OOC. Disadvantages: The plot units are incoherent and the plot is routine. You can know the ending by looking at the beginning. The supporting character has no charisma, often gets killed in anger and brings trouble to the clan, and has no sense of responsibility. The protagonist Earth opens the story but he dislikes the Earth, which hurts his character.

The protagonist Baikaro is being serialized. Advantages: The initial plot is compact, the writing is passable, there are fewer bugs in the original work, there are fewer logic bugs, and there is no OOC Disadvantages: After entering the universe, the plot lacks new ideas, the protagonist's personality completely copies Luo Feng, and the original copy is not very attractive.

Advantages: A balance is achieved between the main plot and the branch plots, the protagonist is successfully created, the supporting characters are successfully created, there are no low-level errors in the whole text, and the speed is average. The plot design is passable, the writing is passable, and the emotional flow is coherent. Disadvantages: The emotional scenes are stereotyped, the weapon names are awkward, and some plots are flawed. The series was cut in half.

Advantages: The protagonist is successfully created, the supporting character design is passable, there are no low-level errors in the whole text, the original work is familiar, and there are few BUGs. The plot design is successful, the writing is good, and the emotional flow is guided smoothly. Disadvantages: The story telling of some plots is very poor, especially the plot design of the genius battle is a complete failure and a complete failure. The series was cut in half.

Advantages: Large number of words, relatively stable updates. The protagonist is successfully created and there are few logical flaws. The plot design is passable, the writing is good, and the emotional flow is guided smoothly. Disadvantages: As a fan, I do not respect the original work, do not study the original work, and pretend to be dead when bugs are pointed out. The author is not very good at telling stories and the villain has a low IQ.

Advantages: Non-conventional protagonist, female character design is more three-dimensional. The plot design is coherent and the writing is passable. The author knows the original work relatively well. Currently being serialized, the future is promising Disadvantages: The protagonist has a vague sense of morality, acts recklessly, lacks planning, and has no charisma. The villain has a low IQ and often has logical flaws. The author is not familiar with writing routines and conflict handling, and his emotional flow guidance is poor.

Advantages: The selection of the protagonist is somewhat innovative, has its own conflicts, and has certain gimmicks. The initial readability is excellent, the writing is passable, and the emotional flow guidance is passable. Disadvantages: Lack of an effective outline, too quick to resolve gimmick conflicts, weak follow-up plot design, serious facial makeup of characters, and multiple logical flaws. The original work is not familiar enough and bugs often appear.

Advantages: The protagonists of the Devouring Starry Sky fanfic are seriously homogeneous. The protagonist of this article is relatively novel, especially the setting of "stick to your heart and just like beautiful women", which is relatively novel and interesting. The writing is comfortable, the picture is strong, and the emotional flow is guided smoothly. Disadvantages: Failure in plot design and lack of effective outline. The emotional scenes are a bit artificial, the author's driving skills are poor, and due to the limitations of the platform, he can't be erotic, and the excitement is reduced. The series was cut in half.

The protagonist fucks the lord of the witch kingdom, included in the premium channel Advantages: It does not start with the earth, it does not rise from the bottom, and it is not a routine story about swallowing the stars. It can be called a different work with the same world view, and it is full of sincerity. The plot design is passable, the emotional flow is smooth, and the book was completed smoothly. Disadvantages: The author's writing power and imagination are average, and the story creation is not exciting enough. The details of the original work are not familiar enough, and there are small errors and omissions from time to time.

Relatively early Devouring fandoms, included in premium channels. Advantages: There are many words, it starts well and ends well, and the book is completed smoothly. There are no sudden changes in style, no sudden illness, and no OOC in the book. The plot design is quite satisfactory, the writing is up to standard, and the emotional flow is generally smooth. Disadvantages: The protagonist failed to be created, the image is completely copied from Luo Feng, and the appearance is similar but not the spirit, the behavior is patterned, the character facial makeup is stereotyped, and there is no personality charm at all. The emotional drama during the Earth Period was a failure.

It is said to be a half-part sequel to Devouring the Starry Sky, but Tomato was slacking off at that time, and I was not optimistic about his ability to reproduce the excitement. In addition, Snow Eagle was in a chaotic state at the beginning, so I couldn't read it.

Devouring the starry sky, this is the true body. An excellent, even excellent, white text, of course, will inevitably end up with diarrhea. Overall, 4 points, not a loss at all. For Lao Bai, after the protagonist joins the Virtual Universe Company, he can put it down, and there will be water behind him. But in other words, Metaverse, Inc. Used to be really good to watch. In addition, the SMS paid subscription back then can no longer be read directly at the starting point, which is disappointing.